Critique an original poem by Jabe

[jabe]

Thank for the idea, Sea Sorbust.

Here goes.




'Jesus wasn't a virgin and I have proof
one day I ran into him in a whorehouse in Montreal
I said Jesus what are you doing with that girl sittin on your face?
he said fuck you fuck you fuck you fuck you
I created the human race'



Yep, I wrote this poem the other day? What do y'all think?

[Ukulele Ike]

Hey, jabe!

I copied out your poem on a piece a notebook paper and I'm submitting it to the....



...oh, no I'm not.

[jabe]

um....OK