Opinionated readers should VOTE!! in The SDMB Short Fiction Contest, May 2013 - Anthology Thread.

Hello, everyone, and welcome to the Anthology Thread of the SDMB Short Fiction Contest, May 2013 edition. The poll will be appearing shortly after 10 PM EDT, Tuesday, May 28th.

A quick recap of the rules -

At 10 AM EDT, Tuesday, May 14th, 2013, I posted a link to a photo (found by random means) and also three words (again, obtained by random means) in an auto-reply message at sdmbpoetrysweatshop at gmail dot com. Writers then had 60 hours to write an original piece of short fiction, no more than 2,000 words in length, based in some way on that photo and those three words. All interested participants worked from the same compulsory material.

The contest closes at 10 PM EDT, Tuesday, May 28th, 2013 - as I write this post, anyone interested in participating still has around 50 hours to write a story, if they wish.

A multiple choice poll will be established shortly to determine the readers’ favourite story. I would also ask voters to choose those stories that have incorporated the compulsory material in the most interesting manner. At the end of a week, the poll will close and we will declare a winner of the PoeHenryParkerSaki award.

The poll, once established, will be a secret ballot type poll. No one need ever know how you voted. I would, however, encourage everyone to please vote. You are providing an important source of feedback to the writers.

Readers’ comments are enthusiastically encouraged!! One favour - please wait until the contest is closed and the poll established before commenting. That way, the first posts in this thread will just be the stories. Once the poll is open, comments are welcome!
The compulsory material is -

The Photograph
and the following three words -
Lightening
Fatalism
Honeysuckle

And now, here are the stories that this contest has produced. I want to point out - the authors’ user names are in spoiler boxes at the end of the stories. Please do not be fooled by the fact that they appear in ‘replies’ sent by me - only one of these stories is mine.

Enjoy!

Le Ministre de l’au-delà

looking forward to some good reads.

The dampness was the first thing that the young woman felt as she woke up. Then came the coolness – not a frigid sort of cold, but the coolness of a spring breeze. These outside impressions soon gave way to what she felt inside of her – nausea, a foul taste in her mouth, and a severe headache.

[spoiler]She tried her best to remember the events of the night before. She was with her best friend, Rick. Rick lived in the house in front of the woods where she had woken up. She remembered drinking a large quantity of sparkling rosé wine, and then having a conversation with Rick. She remembered him saying that she was too inebriated to go home, and that she should spend the night on the couch, but then she said that she should spend the night in the woods instead – she insisted that it would be more poetic and romantic, and anyway, maybe spending a night in the woods would inspire her next artistic project, which she needed ideas for, as she had been getting artist’s block. She remembered Rick having then mumbled something about how she always rambled on and on when she was drunk, and that artists tended to be a crazy bunch anyway.

Pulling herself up from the damp ground, the young woman became more awake. She looked through the woods, and saw a small pool of water. She stood up, and slowly walked over to the pool of water. When she arrived at the water, she decided to lie down in front of it.

Gazing into the water, she could see many things reflected. Blades of grass. Her own face, with her untidy hair and melancholy, somewhat remorseful expression. The trees, and through the trees, the lightening sky. The colour of the sky reminded her of a shade of blue that came in one of her paint tubes – “ocean blue”, it was called, though it was more of a sky blue than an ocean blue.

She began to think – to reflect. The sun was rising. The sun rising every day was something predictable, something inevitable. Was life like that? Was everything in life predetermined? Was fatalism a true concept? Was it unavoidable, drinking wine and then waking up in the forest behind Rick’s house? Or, perhaps, do we each determine our own fates? Would inspiration ever come? Will inspiration come on its own, or do I have to help it along somehow, work at it a little?

The artist reflected on the very idea of reflection. Pools and mirrors reflected differently. Water reflects imperfectly – things like wind across the pool, insects scooting across the surface of the water, and leaves and stones falling into the pool could distort reflections. But mirrors reflected things exactly. It was almost – inevitable. Could I make mirrors reflect things a little more haphazardly, less predictably? thought the young woman.

Gazing into the pool a little while longer, the artist had a vision. Mirrors - not one mirror, but multiple small ones. Each mirror would be positioned so as to reflect a different area of the exhibition space. It would be less predictable, less inevitable than having a single mirror reflecting a single space. Each mirror would be mounted on a pair of feet – the idea would be that the mirror just might be able to relocate itself, reflect something different. The mirrors would not be able to actually move by themselves, but the potential would be there.

The young woman walked through the woods back to Rick’s house, where the fragrant honeysuckle was blooming. The sun had fully risen by this point. All was quiet except for a few birds singing and the sound of the breeze through the forest.

The young woman saw her reflection in the back window of the house. She smiled to herself.
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EmilyG

My ears might be old but they are still sharp. From around the corner, in the kitchen, I heard the slight clinking noise of the lid of the candy dish on my back porch being oh so carefully put back in place, accompanied by whispers and giggles, quickly hushed.

[spoiler]With faces set in the picture of perfect innocence three of my grandchildren came through the kitchen door, on the way to the front room. Andy and Carolyn were seven year old twins, tall for their age, with carrot-orange hair. Rosemary, their cousin, is a year older, but you wouldn’t know it, she being short, olive skinned, and slightly built. Rosie had been a twin as well, my family runs to them, but her sister Honeysuckle had died at the age of two. How my daughter, their mother, had ever gotten involved with the Flowers of the Lord is still a mystery to me, but at least the Flowers were one of the relatively benign cults, if somewhat weird.

I waited until the kids were passing through the archway before I remarked “Well, at least a couple of lemon drops apiece won’t spoil your appetite for dinner.” They jerked as if a shock had run through them and wailed “but Grandma, how did you know?”

“Give your Grandma some credit” I remarked, in as dry a manner as I could muster. “You were taking just a little too long back there. And besides, my own Grandma called that dish The Kid Trap when I tried being quiet with that lid.”

The looks of innocence were replaced by those thoughtful calculation, and broad smiles. “Grandma, after supper, can you tell us the story again?” Not just any story, but THE story. Hmmm, a bit too obvious of a ploy, but they are young and still learning the genteel arts of manipulating those around them.

“Sure thing you little ankle-biters, now go and get changed, you’re all over dirt from the back yard.”

Later we huddled together in the living room. For some reason the kidlets liked hearing this tale in the dark. That there was a storm brewing outside, with thunder and lightening, made it all the better,

“Okay, this happened a loooong time ago, before I married your Grandpa and had your parents.”

“I was working for a catering business. I did the baked goods, you know, the cookies, rolls, pies and such, some…” “of which I still make now!” piped up Andy.

“If you know what I’m going to say” I countered, “maybe YOU should be telling this tale” and gave him a mock stern look. Carolyn elbowed him in the ribs and he shut up.

“Anyway, I got sent to St. Louis, to a big trade show of the RBA, the Retail Bakers of America… My boss was thinking of expanding the business and he wanted me to look up what a lot more suppliers of baking related goods would have on hand… Back home there were only two businesses we had that were able to keep us in stock. And we would need to see what other folks were doing, and get new ideas.”

“So there I was, wandering all over the huge convention hall. I don’t think I’d ever seen a covered room that big in my whole life. There were huge skylights in the roof, and big banks of clear glass windows around the top of the side walls.”

“Tell us the next part, tell us the next part!”

I rolled my eyes and returned to the tale. “ What I hadn’t known before was that there was going to be a VIP in the hall, the freakin’ First Lady of the United States. Why she and her advisors thought that making a personal, informal, inpromptu visit to a trade show floor was a good thing I’ll never know. All it did was make attendance a royal pain in the….(Childish giggles) …backside, with all the extra security for her. You couldn’t turn around for bumping into Secret Service agents with bulges in their armpits and one of those squiggly wires going down the back of their necks and running under their jackets. Now you can get a wire implant but back then it was different.”

“I’m starting to get tired, and to think about just leaving and coming back the next day. I was looking at some booklets a cocoa and chocolate purveyor had, about the many types of products they carried. They also had tasty samples. Suddenly I felt lightheaded, and swayed on my feet. What the heck? Then I noticed light fixtures overhead swaying. People started to scream when the ground began to shake in earnest. I tell you kids, I saw the floor start to have big cracks snake across it, and have ripples, like low waves, travel across it.”

This last part always gave the kids little shivers of scary delight. They weren’t there, but that’s not their fault. Something else will happen to them sometime, something that takes the fun out of being frightened. by stories like mine.

“I was scared but felt in control of myself as I dived for cover un a big table of cookie samples, laid out on glass trays. The trays started to slide off of the table and one shattered just in front of me. I could see the windows up above reflected in dozens of shards of glass, Then those windows began to buckle, and I saw a guy push a tall, skinny lady under the table with me, just before a light fell and squashed him. The woman had blood running down her face from a gash on her forehead. It looked nasty, but cuts on your scalp bleed like crazy and aren’t always deep.”

“All at once the shaking stopped and for just a minute it almost seemed quiet, just because it had sounded so loud before. The screaming and crying got louder again, because so many were injured. I took another look at the woman with me in that short quiet. She had pulled back on of her long sleeves and was trying to wipe the blood off and then I recognized her. It was Lauren Cosgrove, the First Lady. Her eyes were wide and staring but she seemed in control of herself. Some people said her parents had been Flowers of the Lord for a while, and they tend to self-discipline and a certain brand of fatalism. I don’t know if the stories about her folks are true, and it’s none of my business anyway.”

“The Arch, the Arch!” prompted Rosemary.

“Hold on, I’m getting to that. Now, the earthquake that hit us was caused by something called, okay, who remembers?”

“The New Madrid fault!” they all chorused.

“St. Louis didn’t even get the worst of the damage, although the peak of the Gateway Arch did fall out. Lauren Cosgrove and I helped each other get outside. Seeing a bleeding civilian holding a bleeding First Lady made the surviving security on the convention center plaza kind of twitchy but she set them straight soon enough. Another story I‘d heard was that nobody crossed her.“

“All I know is that she was nice enough to me. The next year, 2021, when a one-year memorial was held, your Grandma got invited to the program in Washington D.C. and got to have dinner at the White House!”

In the dark the kids let off a “YAY!!!”

“She was even nice when I told her I’d voted for “the other guy” “

The silence at the end of my tale stretched out a while longer, and I knew that the kids were getting up their nerve to as for the very last part of the story.

Finally, “can we touch it Grandma? One more time? Please?

Remember how I said my hearing is still good? But that I had been bleeding too? Well, I feel fine and my hearing is good, but the one “real” injury I got was when something fell on me tht was so sharp it sliced off two-thirds of my right ear. The kids think it’s cool to feel the edges of it, and I don’t mind. I keep it covered by hair most of the time, when I’m away from home, so it’s not too noticeable.

“Now, it’s time for you rascals to be in bed” and with remarkably little whining they went upstairs to their room.

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Baker

“Catherine Louise Harper killed Martin Vincent von Trier – she has practically confessed and bragged about the fact. But just because we know “whodunit” doesn’t mean we can figure out how! And without proof, that evil bitch is going to get away with it!”

Detective Charlie Manson (OK, stop the damned jokes about the name, already!) was angry and let the other detectives know about it in no uncertain terms.

“Let’s start at the beginning and go over the evidence again!”

The other detectives sighed and rolled their eyes. They had gone over the evidence a thousand times and they could not figure out how in the hell she did it.

[spoiler]Martin Vincent von Trier was a 35 year old, multi-billionaire. He was owner and CEO of his late father’s vast holdings of international real estate. One of NYC’s most eligible bachelors, Martin was the son of an Austrian Duke and his mother was an African American actress, quite famous on the Broadway stage. Martin was tall, dark and handsome – in addition to being extremely fit and charming to women of all ages. He had been on the cover of hundreds of magazines, dating the most beautiful actresses, photo models and royal princesses from around the world. His idea of a first date was a quick flight on his private jet with a layover in Paris for lunch and then be on his $2 billion dollar yacht in the Mediterranean by dinner. He would then whisk back to NYC to carry on with business by noon the next day.

Catherine Louis Harper was a gorgeous, 28 year old, supermodel Harvard MBA heiress to her late father’s corporation, Honeysuckle Industries. It was a cosmetics company that had made billions simply by designing specific lines of cosmetics for women of all races, complexions and skin conditions. They had cornered the cosmetics market world-wide. Their all-natural products were considered to be the best and safest products on the market – and some of their product lines were even being used to treat rare skin diseases.

When Martin met Catherine, it was love at first sight; the perfect match of beauty, brains and wealth. Theirs was a whirlwind, fairy tale romance of epic proportions; two of the most wealthy, beautiful people on earth were on the front pages of every tabloid, leading up to a rumored $800 million wedding ceremony.

However, not every fairy tale has a happy ending, and Martin and Catherine were once again on the front pages of every tabloid in their very bitter and very public divorce two years later. “I will make sure he burns in hell!” was Catherine’s widely publicized comment.

Still, you can only imagine the news coverage when Martin was discovered dead in his NYC office – well, what remained of Martin was discovered. Only DNA and partial dental records could prove without a doubt it was his body.

He died of spontaneous combustion.

“There is no such thing as spontaneous combustion in human beings – period!” That pretty much summed up the testimony of every scientist on earth.

Still – there was that pile of smoldering human remains that had no other explanation.

Martin’s office was on the 45th floor of his sleek, glass corporate headquarters. He had elaborate security – guards, a series of locked doors that could only be accesses with facial and voice recognition, video surveillance and even a very devoted and mean German Shepard dog, Blitz, who seemed as perplexed as anyone else when they broke down the door to find the ashes of Martin at, and around, his desk.

Video surveillance showed Martin and his dog had entered his office about 10:00 AM and he had made several phone calls and had been working on his computer. Not a single person entered his office all day. Then, at exactly 2:16 PM, video in Martin’s office show him suddenly bursting in a huge flame and – poof – Martin disappeared in a puff of smoke, leaving pretty much nothing but ash behind.

The detectives had gone over the footage so often they could tell you how many times Martin had blinked. Every scientist was shown the film over and over again, in slow motion and at normal speed, and nobody could see anything that could possibly have caused this to happen. There was no sudden lightning bolt – it was a beautiful, bright sunny day in New York. As an avid non-smoker, there was no lighter nor matches nor any other device that could have sparked a flame, but even if there had been, nothing explained how he would have burst into flame, and at such a high temperature, as to literally cremate his body in less than a second!

Blitz was just fine – not a singe on that dog’s hair – so it couldn’t have been some odd gas explosion in the room. Not only that, but there wasn’t so much as a burn on the carpet or desk or anything on the desk – even the computer only had a slight bit of ash that settled on the keyboard, but no real damage. Martin had been sitting in a custom designed, clear plastic acrylic office chair, and even that chair had only slight damage from the burn – a slight melting of the arm of the chair, but nothing to show a man had burned to ashes while sitting in it.

Nope – there it was, in perfect color and HD video – Martin Vincent von Trier burst into flames and if that wasn’t spontaneous combustion, what the hell was it?

There were a few scientists who mentioned the very slight possibility that ketosis, possibly caused by Martin’s high protein but low-carb dieting, perhaps produced high acetone levels, which is highly flammable and might possibly, in a rare instance, make him more flammable. But still, there would have to have been a huge, high temperature spark somewhere. Even a tank of gasoline needs a spark to explode, and there was no source of ignition. They could look at the footage over and over again, but not a single spark until Martin went up in his ball of flame.


If anyone didn’t need an alibi, it was Catherine. She had been in Los Angeles for three days prior and was attending a charity event luncheon when Martin’s death occurred. Every footstep she made during that trip had been documented by paparazzi.

There was video of her hearing the news and it was not pretty. Catherine laughed and said, “The prick deserved it. I am a firm believer in fatalism – you are powerless, regardless of all the wealth and power you achieve. Martin had it all, but in the end, it was all smoke and mirrors and then - poof – gone in a ball of flame. In my opinion, the bastard got what he deserved and I hope he continues to burn in hell forever.”


Stumped.

Detective Charlie Manson was stumped, and he didn’t like being stumped.

Months passed. It was now almost one year to the day, and Martin Vincent von Trier’s death remained a mystery.


Detective Charlie Manson went to his granddaughter’s birthday and paid to have a magic show for the all the kids at the party. The magician was quite good and the kids loved it. At the end, the magician said, “Remember kids, this might all be smoke and mirrors up here on stage, but magic happens for real! You just have to believe!”

Charlie felt a chill go up his spine.

“Smoke and mirrors! SMOKE AND MIRRORS!”

Charlie made a call to his detective buddies.

“I know how she did it! I know how the bitch killed von Trier!”


Charlie had told the detectives to set up the room exactly the way the room had been set up in Martin’s office the day he died. It was June 17th, the same exact day the remains of Martin’s body was found in his office.

At precisely 2:00 PM, Catherine Louis Harper showed up with her attorney, responding to the summons she had received.

“I have no idea why you have called me here, “ she said, with some indignity.

“You will find out soon enough,” Charlie said, taking his time and savoring the moment, “Do you recognize this?”

Charlie held a jar of “Carte Blanc”.

“Of course, “ Catherine said, “it is one of our more popular products to help lighten the skin due to blemishes and birthmarks and pre-cancerous lesions.”

“It is also used by people of color, lightening the skin, to make them appear more Caucasian over a period of time, isn’t it?”

Catherine nodded, “That was not what it was designed to do, but yes – it could be used to accomplish that if someone so wished.”

“And you knew that Martin used your product?” Charlie walked to the side of the desk.

Catherine nodded, “Yes. However, he only used it in certain areas of his body where there were some skin color deviations, certainly not to hide his heritage out of shame.”

“Mostly on his back,” Charlie Manson said as he moved to the front of the desk, “he had some discoloration on his back, didn’t he?”

“Yes – there were a few spots on his back and he would occasionally apply some of that product to even out the color – especially if he were going to be out on the water wearing only his bathing suit – or less…” Catherine said, with a slight smile referring to Martin’s naked body.

“Martin was planning to go out on his yacht in the Greek Isles a few days after his untimely death.”

“Oh? I was not aware of that.” Catherine said calmly.

“Really? It was common knowledge that he would spend every summer on his yacht – what do you think - would he have been using Carte Blanc in preparation for his summer vacation?”

“I wouldn’t know. Perhaps.”

“Oh, I think you were quite sure.”

Charlie came over to Catherine and said, “Would you like to go sit in Martin’s chair, behind the desk?”

Catherine looked slightly nervous, checked her watch and didn’t move, “I am quite comfortable here.”

Charlie noticed, “Ah yes, just about 2:16 on June 17th…the exact day and time of Martin’s death.”

Charlie took the small jar of Carte Blanc and set it on Martin’s chair.

At exactly 2:16, the jar suddenly burst in flame and another detective put it out with a fire extinguisher he had been holding in his hands.

“Imagine that. What are the odds of another spontaneous combustion fire in the same office, same chair, on the same day and time?”

Catherine said nothing as Charlie told his tale.

“However, if you have a custom made acrylic chair that has just the slightest of imperfection – for instance, if someone filed carefully in the back of the chair to make one section become almost a magnifying glass – I can remember how horrible I was as a kid and burned ants using a magnifying glass. And imagine if someone who owned a building, let’s say on the 47th floor of that building, three blocks away - imagine if they had a series of mirrors – we found about 30 mirrors stored there – but imagine if all those mirrors were precisely lined up to reflect a single beam of sunlight at exactly 2:16 – the exact moment the sun hit those windows - to reflect off those mirrors and zap that strong ray of light directly into the back of this chair at that exact spot. And imagine if a man on a low carb diet, his body already rather full of acetone was also greased up with a product that contained high levels of nitroglycerin, a chemical that under very high heat, was proven to be quite explosive – but of course, this was never a danger to most customers in normal sunlight and, after all, what are the odds of a blast of very hot, white hot, rays hitting exactly that spot on the body?”

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DMark

Le Min, can you check your PM’s please?

Miles stopped dead-cold under the entranceway of their university’s dilapidated concession hall, dumbfounded. They had consent to use it for a physics experiment, but this looked like someone threw a grenade into a lab at MIT.

“Miles! Christ, man, could you have taken any longer?”

Cables, tubing, and exposed copper wire snaked in every direction; even up. Ping pong tables were lashed together, shouldering myriad chemical lasers, optics, and prisms. Tanks of liquid nitrogen seemed to be keeping the electronic’s temperature at bay—hell, the murky atmosphere in this old hall seemed as if it was already standing on the edge of the sun’s corona. Huddled in between this bewildering mess were hundreds of servo-controlled, rectangular parabolic mirrors. The air smelled of ozone.

[spoiler]All were tracking and focusing the summer’s sunlight, which blazed through the hall’s leaded glass, onto a metal plated sphere; its conductive petals flowering out toward a dish that hovered above. This metal tree-like fixture was entwined by thick cables, like vines. It was Miles’s design, he worked out the amount of time needed to accumulate enough of the sun’s energy to build up enough charge to send, at most, 100 kilograms of mass backward in time by at least four hours; five if they were lucky.

So, while Miles was visiting home, Tristan had put it all together—without him.

The metal sphere was essentially a time-bomb. It was capable of retaining the equivalent amount of energy released by Little Boy over Hiroshima; so long as the coolant held. The trick was unleashing it within a few picoseconds into a gamma-ray burst the thickness of a needle aimed toward a tiny quantum-entangled plate, no bigger than the size of a fly’s dick.

“Miles!” Tristan yelled.

Miles’s gaze switched from his bemused fixation on the surroundings to his colleague, who was not only yelling something, but seemed to be holding a limp body in his arms. The blazer of the body matched his own. So did his hair. Also his face.

The body was full of blood and badly burned. Miles’s head began to redden with blood as well. Rage. Confusion. Fear.

“I don’t–”

“Shut up, and careful where you step! We have a fucking situation here; I need you to look at me, Miles. Look me in the eyes, and focus on what I’m about to tell you.”

Miles’s gaze drifted again. He was beginning to swoon.

“Miles! My eyes! Tell me you’re with me!”

His eyes snapped back onto Tristan’s. Tunnel vision seemed to crystalize his focus. They were both geniuses in their own way, and each had a way of keeping the other in check—Tristan, impulsive yet brazen; Miles, focused like a laser, yet antisocial and prone to anxiety. Yet, each brought the best out of the other, and with little more than an hour before the inevitable, the only one who can save both their lives today, was the recently departed.

“I—I’m with you.”

Tristan took in a breath and began to explain.

“I need to talk fast, there’s only so much time.” Tristan’s eyes flicked over to a monitor that displayed an ominous countdown clock. Miles’s eyes followed over to the display and saw the red countdown pealing backwards, reading ‘01hrs:18min:05sec:08hths.’

“This morning, I fired it up; a simple systems check, and I swear to you, it wasn’t on for more than fifteen-seconds when you—shit, man—You just appeared in the cage.”

“How? How did this happen? I can’t wrap my head around it!”

“Miles, I know. I know. It was stupid, but we’re gonna have to curb our emotions right now. I’m exhausted, and what can I tell you other than, for some reason, at 3:11 PM later this afternoon, you step into that cage, and arrive earlier this morning at 11:27 AM? You collapsed, right here. Blood just started coming out of your ears and nose and—you were coughing up so much blood—”

Tristan was whimpering. He looked back down at future-Miles’s lifeless body, and remembered something. He collected his thoughts.

“You were able to tell me something before you died.”

“What? What did I say?”

Tristan sighed, “You said, ‘Make sure I still go through.’”

“No. No way! How could I say that?”

“Miles—”

“No, we need to power this down. Can’t we just power it down?”

“No, Miles, we can’t.”

“Why not? I’ll just pull the mainline on the Chevrefoil Sphere.”

“If we power down, we loose the entanglement. You, of all people, know the math. See for yourself, it’s been continually tracking the Riemann geodesics along complex-spacetime. We sever that, and there’s no chance to salvage this outcome.”

“Jesus. I didn’t say anything else?”

“Um—yes, but Miles, you were—delirious.”

“Tell me.”

“It was, well—you called me ‘honey.’ ‘Make sure I still go through, honey.’ That’s what you said, verbatim. It was kind of sweet, really, but like I said, your brain was fried, man. Maybe you were thinking of Marie.

Miles looked to the ceiling in helpless exasperation, shaking his head “I don’t call her ‘honey.’” Tristan just shrugged and despite the awkward turn, his face couldn’t look any more serious.

“How 'bout, I just won’t go into the cage?”

“But, you do go into the cage. Here you are.” Miles couldn’t help but look into his own lifeless eyes.

“That’s fatalism.”

“You know the math.”

Of course he did. It was Miles’s own brilliant breakthrough, using the field equations of the New Physics, that moved his beautiful theory into an experimental reality. The Nobel Prize seemed inevitable, although now that was uncertain; the Nobel Prize isn’t awarded posthumously, inventing time-travel or not.

Miles distantly recalled the bleak prediction, “It becomes a quantum-paradox. If I don’t go through, the paradox will accelerate every atom which is supposed to traverse beyond my past light-cone to the speed of light. All the matter that makes up—me—will collapse into a micro-black hole and evaporate in an instant.”

“Miles. I have a plan.”

“One that involves me going through? To only meet this fate!” He pointed at his burned corpse.

“There are coefficients we can fudge! The energies were too high. Yes, you need to still go through, but we—you—can fix this!”

“I’d have to know dozens of variables, let alone how many terajoules we used! How can I possibly compensate for something that we haven’t even done yet?”

"Those,” Tristan shifted his head toward the mirrors. Miles looked at them, all silently whirring, sitting like unhatched eggs ready to birth their potential. He understood what Tristan was getting at; you tend to develop a shorthand when working with a good partner.

Simple extrapolation. If Tristan kept accurate logs of the energy the mirror-arrays had been building up over the last two weeks, working out the projection would almost be trivial.

“How tight is your array data?”

“Hey, what kind of physicist would I be if I did run a tight ship?”

“Let’s not get carried away, you couldn’t balance a checkbook.”

“Who uses a checkbook anymore? That’s why we have computers—the logs are on terminal two,” he motioned in the direction of a computer at the end of the hall.

Miles gingerly traversed the labyrinth of cables and mirrors, making his way to the terminal, as if crossing a turbulent river, hopping from one slippery stone to another to make it across. His toe caught on two ends of frayed copper wire. It connected briefly with another exposed lead nearby, and a blue-white spark zapped across Miles’s Converse shoe. Tristan let out a tiny yelp, but all seemed fine.

Miles plopped into the computer chair with a heavy sigh. Sloppy.

He pressed the spacebar, killing the screensaver, and a login screen appeared.

“Uh—password?”

“‘Honeysuckle.’ All lowercase, zero for the ‘o,’ a one for the ‘l’.”

“‘Honeysuckle?’ Shit, Tristan—‘honey.’”

Tristan stared blankly; it didn’t click with him. Miles sighed again.

“I wasn’t calling you ‘honey,’ dipshit. I was referring to Chevrefoil!”

“Well, you were pretty incapacitated. You mean the Sphere?”

“Christ, man, not the Sphere,” they both looked up at the apparatus that was the locus of this entire fiasco. “If I know myself, and I think I do, I was referring to Chevrefoil. Medieval French Poetry. It’s French for—”

“Yeah, I know what it’s French for, Einstein. I’m the one who came up with the name.” He came up with “Chevrefoil Sphere,” because of its honeysuckle-like appearance. That, and it just sounded cool.

Miles recalled the 12th century lai; a romantic, lyrical rhyme of love, passion and fairy-tales. It tells of an adulterous love-triangle between a King, his wife the Queen, and the King’s beloved nephew, a Knight. The story, however, alludes to a cyclical and indefinitely repeating nature of romantic passion versus the cold, harsh nature working against it all: Reality.

That’s when it all clicked into place: The centerpiece of the poem is how the Knight is able to overcome his exile and redeem their love and make peace with his Uncle. She would be en route to a festival, so the Knight hacked off a branch of hazel, entwined with honeysuckle, and carved notches, crafting a wooden flute only she would recognize; she was familiar with his craft. The song would draw them together.

The stick became more than a signal. A symbol of their love; their lives. The carved notches formed a tally; some equation the future added up saving both their lives that day.

Miles turned away from the monitor filled with array data.

Tristan was expecting good news. “Well?”

“It’s absolute shit. Totally unusable.”

Honeysuckle inseparable from a hazel tree lest they both perish. A symbol. A tally.

He looked at his arm, then back over to Tristan.

“Bullshit. Why are you smiling?”

“Look at my arm.”

He squinted in confusion toward Miles’s left arm, as he was rolling up the cuff on his blazer.

“No, dipshit, his arm.” Tristan looked at the blood-smeared forearm of the corpse. Just past the rolled cuff, he spotted tally marks scrawled on his forearm in red Sharpie marker.

Four red lines with a diagonal slash striking through, and one more line beside it.

Realization dawned on Tristan’s face, his revelation almost lightened the room.

“We’ve done this six times? Six times!” As Tristan was taking it in, Miles wore a knowing smile. He looked down at a red Sharpie there on the desk. Beside it was an old pad of yellow sticky notes.

“Check my pocket.” Miles was pointing to his shirt pocket, peeking out behind his blazer.

Tristan, still wide-eyed, reached in and pulled out a folded sticky. Scrawled on it were several equations which read like divine music. They now had the data to make a seventh jump—or more.

Miles drew not six, but seven red tally marks on his arm. To Tristan’s amazement, the first six markings were perfectly identical to those on the corpse. “This has all happened before,” said Miles.

• • •

He tucked away the sticky note with all the information they’ll use on this seventh attempt and entered the Faraday cage.

“I have to admit, you’ve got some mighty balls.”

“Made of brass, they are.”

“Hell, tungsten carbide if you ask me.” Tristan pulled the cage door shut, latching it. The countdown read, ‘00hrs:00mins:22sec:73hths.’

“Miles—I’ll see you in the morning,” and with that, Tristan Gotelef, Ph.D, tapped the ‘enter’ key on terminal two. In mere picoseconds, future-Miles’s corpse collapsed into a singularity. To Tristan, it seemed he simply vanished—both of them—in a brilliant flash of heat and light.

• • •

When Tristan looked away from the cage, he swung around to see Miles smiling under the main entrance—there were eleven red tally marks on his forearm. Tristan was speechless.

“Happy to see me—honey?”[/spoiler]

cmyk

“Hello honey bee,” she said to Apis. Her pet name referenced many things about him – his name, the way he was constantly multitasking, hopping between projects, and the yellow and black striped stickers he had adorned to his wheel chair to make it faux macho.

“Hello honeysuckle,” he replied to Loni. It had been an automatic reply when he first said long ago, a reference to bees and flowers, with a womanly touch, but it seemed appropriate since the yellow stamens of the flower rising from within slender white petals reminded him in a way of her caramel skin and the white sleeveless shirts she always wore to show off her impressive yet somehow still feminine biceps, with the added intention of saving her more formal clothing from being ruined by stained as she worked with technical equipment for her work and paint for her sculptural hobby. Today though she also had on an unfamiliar fedora.

[spoiler]“So what brings us here today? A bit early for our usual lunch. And what’s with the hat?”

“I have something to show you. I proved God,” she said with a smirk that told the story of a thousand metaphysical debates they had engaged in over the years between his skeptical tendencies and her more imaginative ones.

“God? Isn’t that my department?”

“You would think so, Professor Y.” A nickname his students thought he didn’t know about, from his wheel chair and position in the philosophy department. But let them have their fun, at least he still had his hair.

She circled behind him and began to push him towards a cube structure made of bricks with an opening shaped like a mushroom. “Anyway, it’s more than that, it’s the ultimate answer. But naturally, that sort of thing has to include God. And physics. Which is where I come in. But today I’m wearing a different hat.” She pointed to the fedora. “In honor of my new found success as a metafictional detective.”

Normally he preferred to wheel himself around, but he made an exception for her, because with her it was a simple expression of love. “Don’t you mean metaphysical? Anyway, the ultimate answer? Of life, the universe, and everything? I thought we figured that out already. It’s 42. What we need is the ultimate question.

“That part has always been obvious. Who and what are we? Where are we? What are we doing? 42 is just a seed, a compressed algorithm that references the full answer.”

“Which is?”

“All of existence, all possible existences. But I have an abbreviated version.”

She paused and let that sink in as they approached the structure and passed through the opening. As they rolled over the metal grating, a strong warm continuous flow of air rushed up from below. It was a simple sensation, one they had repeatedly experienced, but it had yet to lose its charm.

They exited the ventilation structure and rolled towards the Physics building. Finally he broke the silence. “And you can prove all this?”

“I did. But we speak different languages you and I. I can tell you where I started, and where I ended up, but the middle part is very complicated. You would have to learn a bunch of equations and physics and so forth first. I don’t think I can easily translate the process, but perhaps I can translate the results.”

They took the elevator to the basement level which was much larger than the building, and circular, the circumference of which held an older model particle accelerator. The two central corridors crossing under the center of the building, one of which they had started down, were so long that they had been dubbed “The Infinite Void,” and the other branching hallways were so dimly lit and easy to get lost in that they were collectively known as “The Labyrinth of the Mind.” Loni liked to come down to the basement and take advantage of the near limitless stretches of blackboard that lined all of the walls of the corridors. She felt like involving her body in the process kept her both grounded and invigorated.

“Let’s begin at the end and work out way back to the beginning. Here it is, the answer.” She pointed to the blackboard. Her scribblings seem to have taken up every blackboard. At this end, there was a final equation. It h”as to do with relativity, transformations and translations, canceling out multiple infinities, fractals, self-reflexivity, and…I think it will be easier just to show you.”

“Lead on, Don Quixote!”

Eventually they made their way to the central nexus, a large circular room in the middle of which was cut out a lower area surrounded by concentric circular rings that doubled as seats and steps. Loni had completely transformed the space for her project. Sitting on the steps, and attached to the walls, and unseen by Apis at the ends of the corridors, were hundred of carefully positioned mirrors.

“So the experiment I’d been working on in the lab inspired my latest sculpture.” She walked over to a panel on the wall and turned off the lights. Her voice cut through the darkness. “I call it Lighting the Infinite Void, Illuminating the Labyrinth of the Mind.”

He heard another switch being pulled and some far away machinery whirring above him. Into the ceiling was a long shaft rising all the way to the roof of the building, where there was a hatch that could be opened to let in the sun. He was amazed as a wide beam of light suddenly appeared like a bolt of lightening, and reflected off the mirrors, bouncing off in a million different directions. They shot down the corridors and back, seeming to coalesce into a bright hazy ball of light floating in the center.

“That’s beautiful…but what does it mean?”

“Light the infinite void. Got me to thinking about the essential medium of the universe. A phrase from Marshal McLuhan occurred to me, ‘the medium is the message’. What if space time, or whatever space time is part of, is at some level made up of the same substance or essence as the things which it contains? Wave particle duality, all that. So, basically, everything is energy, waves, just equations, math, information. Information can be thought of ideas, ultimately, as consciousness. So the cosmos is literally made out of the same essential substance as is our imagination.”

“Wow, that’s a bit of a leap.”

“Have you seen the blackboards? I’ve connected all the dots. It’s all meticulously and methodically linked.” She pointed to the mirrors. He appeared puzzled. “Look closer.”

He stared for awhile. “Oh.” His eyes lit up. Each mirror was reflecting every other mirror in a sort of fractal pattern, and each segment was reflecting something part of her long proof from all the blackboards. Her proof wasn’t just one long series of steps, each step referenced every other step, in a sort of self-reflexive network. “That’s…”

“Amazing. I know. But inevitable. We’ve had all the elements for a long time, we just had to assemble them in a certain way. Everyone has been busy trying to figure out their own tiny piece of the puzzle and specializing that they’ve lost sight of the big picture. And here’s the cool thing, you gave me the final piece. Remember Ken Wilber?”

“Yes, I told you about him. Integral Philosophy.”

“Exactly. Essentially, everything is true within it’s context, so how do you deal with the paradox of relativism and competing truth? The greater truth is the one which includes and integrates the lesser truth from a greater perspective. Microcosm and macrocosm. All the parts reflect the whole.”

“The cosmos is a self generating self reflexive fractal equation. It is made of information, so it has consciousness. Because these are all equivalent, anything that can be imagined can exist. Because time is a construct, anything that can exist will exist, and therefore already exists. Because of relatvisitc transformations and self reflexivity, every part not only reflects and contains the whole, but also has immediate and essentially unlimited access to the whole. And because of a principle similar to differential pressure, every part has a sort of natural tendency to gradually transform into a more complete expression of the whole.”

“The end result is that basically, every particle, every bit of information, every thing that is or could be, inevitably has the experience of becoming God. Well, God sounds a bit anthropomorphic. Let’s call it the Logos or Tao.”

“Assuming that’s right, it sounds a bit fatalistic.” He said.

“Ah, but everything is made of an ever increasing consciousness, which involves choice. You can always head the other way if you choose, or stagnate, but why would you? And while the end result is the same, you get to choose the particular path you take along the way. There’s some more about free will versus determinism that involves uncertainty, fuzzy logic, and other complicated things that I won’t get into, but the gist is that the idea of ‘living in the moment’ and ‘the eternal now’ can actually be expressed mathematically as an equation, the ideal solution to which balances out free will and determinism such that essentially, we are always choosing the optimal fate. We are always in the best of both worlds. Because of the nature of metatime, every experience is simultaneously a spontaneous creation and also a memory. The point ends up being, everyone is the author of their own story.”

“So why do certain things seem to suck?” He laughed. “Why ever have evil, suffering, and so on?”

“There’s a few reasons. First, generically bad things like accidents are just side effects of choosing at this stage to have the experience of imperfect knowledge, novelty, surprise, limited form, progress, and so forth. We don’t choose random things specifically, but we allow them within our parameters. Secondly, consequence and stakes give us a sense of gravitas and meaning, Third, in order to properly learn the ideal balance of various factors, we must first map out their extremes. Fourth, while pain is a natural physical consequence of our parameters, suffering is not. Suffering is caused by a metaphysical reluctance to accept change, or attachment, although of course it has physical and psychological side effects.”

“So what is the solution?”

“State of mind. Lower, less expansive states of mind have greater potential for self destructiveness, and inevitably sabotage their own capacity for power. The only way to sustainably maintain greater power is by expanding the mind. As with integral philosophy, this means anticipating and imagining the solution to one of life’s great paradoxes: how to approach life in a way that ideal whether you are a particle, a human, or a god, whether you only have ten minutes to live or whether you will never die.”

“The awareness that I am made of the same essential substance as every part of myself, and I am part of something larger than myself that is also the same. And I am not alone. I can commune with my greater context through others like me. And I can experience a deeper more intimate and meaningful connection with the cosmos through a partner of my choosing.”

Apis smiled. “So it turns out this detective story is really a love story after all. So where does this all lead?”

“I think you know. Are you ready to take responsibility as the author of your own story?”

He looked down at his legs. “How, practically, does it work?”

“You must believe, believe with more than your head, than your heart, than your body. You must believe with every part and on every level of your being. You must bring your entire self with you to the new chapter of your story, to your new reality. Leave no part behind except for those parts you no longer wish to identify with.”

But there was one last obstacle.

“If I do this, how do I do it right. This is huge. I’m afraid of what it could lead to,”

“Don’t worry. The easiest and most effective way to consistently sustain an expansive state of mind and an ideal evolving reality is to simply always make your choices with loving kindness.”

He jokingly sang “all you need is love…”

“Love is all you need,” she sang back. “Another thing I learned from physics. It is the forces we cannot see which are sometimes the most powerful and the most real.”

“I guess I’m ready. How do I do it?”

“Just believe.”

He wasn’t sure that everything she said made sense to him yet, or that if it had been conveyed to him by anyone else that he would believe it. But the one thing he had always believed in was her, and in their love for each other. He centered his mind, and began to imagine. He saw clearly the difference between two states and their superposition, and the transformative equation that formed the transitioning gradient. He let it fill him and felt it deeply. He gripped the arm rests and slowly began to rise. Finally, he stood, and clapped.

“I do believe in fairies!”

They both laughed deeply, for a long time, and then tightly embraced.

“Now what?”

“Now we dance.”

She lift his arm and twirled him around.

“And then?”

“And then, my love, we fly.”
[/spoiler]

jackdavinci

This should be good, Beth thought, picking up the book. It would be long; it had that heft to it, nice and thick. A smirk twisted her lips at how that could be misinterpreted. Well, if you couldn’t have a nice, thick, what-you-really-want, then a good book and a cold drink would have to suffice. Welcome to Friday night in the summer, out here in the suburbs.

[spoiler]It was her own fault. Things could be different. All she had to do was stop pretending that she didn’t understand Rick’s jokes, and stop pretending his jokes were only jests. And maybe she wouldn’t be so tired if she didn’t keep trying to cajole Dr. Fischer out of his blistering, black moods. It wasn’t her job to always be the one lightening the atmosphere in the lab. Those dark tempers of his seemed to be more frequent these days, as research progressed in tedious increments.

But it was Friday night, she was tired, and happy to be home alone. To not have to make conversation or listen to the self-absorbed inflicting conversation on her. Work was tiring, but more so was the way Beth became there. She’d realised she was always trying to reduce tension, mediate between people who clashed, to joke them out of bad humour and foul temper. That obligation was changing her in ways she didn’t like, making her first a jokester, and then a joke, just to cajole a smile from everyone else.

“I’m not going to do it any more,” she told the back yard. “It’s not my job to be the chief cheer engineer. I quit.” And it probably wasn’t good for her job, or her career. Playing the clown wouldn’t get her a raise. Or taken seriously. She was a scientist, for Christ’s sake.

Two uncharacteristic drinks later, Beth realised she should have eaten dinner. The neighbour on the north side of the back yard was barbecuing something, and it drifted over, inciting a fierce, carnivorous hunger. “I want some meat,” she advised her glass, and smirked. It smelled so good, that savoury, sizzling, smoky… Barbecue warred with the sweeter scent of honeysuckle along the other side of the yard. Summer, in two distinctively different aromas, bringing back all those summers before…

How time rushed. And she wasn’t really doing anything, was she? She was drifting down the river of life, leaving it to the currents to take her to her destination. That kind of fatalism had left her sitting alone on a Friday night, stuck in a research job that she wasn’t sure that she even wanted any more, playing the fool in the lab, trying to please everyone. “Except me,” Beth addressed the gin. Instead of dinner, she’d decided to have another drink, and lose herself in its pleasant haze. It was easy to get hazy when you didn’t do it often.

Maybe it was time to stop drifting. To stop playing the clown and do what she wanted to, and not care about how everyone else was. And what she wanted was… what? Well, not to waste another summer. No supper tonight, but what about tomorrow night? There was Rick. And his flirtatious offers, veiled in his jokes. She wasn’t the only one who wore that kind of mask. What if she stopped laughing them off? What might happen? All she had to do was pick up the phone, and find out.

And with the taste of summer gin on her tongue, that was surprisingly easy to do.

Rick brought the steaks, and he was freshly shaved. Out of the context of work, he was a different man. “I thought you might be joking yesterday,” he grinned on her doorstep. “But I came anyway.”

“Well, I’d had a drink. Someone gave me some gin. But come in,” Beth said. “I’ll show you the barbecue. And you can show me how a cattle country man cooks steak.”

And it turned out to be very well indeed. “My god,” she said, as they sat in the back yard. Now it was her garden that wafted glorious tempting scents throughout the neighbourhood. “That was good.” And it had been so much less uncomfortable than she’d feared. The two bottles of red wine she’d bought that morning had helped, but there was something about Rick, too, that put her at ease. He was a nice guy, and he wasn’t that bad looking, once you got him out of that awful lab coat and away from his computer. He’d dressed in a decent pair of shorts and a nice short-sleeved shirt. Beth had waffled on what to wear, settling for a summer dress, sandals, and her hair up in a loose knot. A bit of gloss on her lips and a spritz of cologne her sister had given her three birthdays ago finished things up. There was no point in frightening him with some sort of glamorous transformation, one that she didn’t have skills or the equipment for.

They’d cooked together, making a salad, potatoes, cutting French bread and sipping French wine, then carrying the dinner things out to the back yard. I’m not nervous, she thought once, as she handed him the plate. “Let ‘em rest at least five minutes,” he said. “People cut too early, you lose all the juice.” He was as easy to be around in her small house as he was at work. It was nice.

They stayed outside as evening turned to dusk, finishing off the wine, the cake she’d bought still in the kitchen. Neither were ready for dessert. Talking was easy; there was work griping and gossiping, then his university days, and hers, and going back further, their similar lives as high school nerds. “You turned out okay,” Beth said, made bolder by the wine, and the way night fell softly, the blue sky deepening to indigo. More than okay. He’s really cute. She liked sitting in the summer twilight with him, laughing, even as talk circled back to work.

“Oh!” Beth stood, remembering. “Come inside,” she said. “I’ll show what I found out last week.” The bedroom was big, and the living room was small, so her computer was in the corner by the window. She sat and called up the paper she’d been reading through, finding the translation from Norwegian challenging. The ideas, however, were intriguing. Rick stood behind her, reading. After a few moments, he placed his hand over hers, stilling her as she was about to click on to the next page. Then his lips brushed the back of her neck, as soft as a sigh.

He moved away. She sat, very still. “Come here,” Rick said, sitting on her bed. “I’ll show you something else I know how to do.” Beth closed her eyes. Stop drifting. Decide.

“So show me,” she said.

Beth woke, knowing there was something she’d forgotten. To put the strawberry shortcake, with its whipped cream, back into the fridge. That was it. A summer dessert for a summer night. They’d skipped cake, and… even in the dark, she felt a blush. And still in the dark, she felt her smile. That had been even better than strawberry shortcake with real whipped cream.

The television was still on, the set on the bureau. What had they been watching? They’d fallen into her bed, and twisted the sheets and cover into a mess on the floor, while skin moved against skin, and tongue slid along tongue, moving lower, until she’d cried out. And again when he slid into her, never mind that the window was open and the neighbours could hear. Rick had been as adept with her pleasure as he was with the steaks. Who would have guessed?

They’d finally eaten dessert naked, while watching the local news. And slept, sated, under a single sheet she’d pulled free of the comforter. They’d left everything else on the floor.

Beth couldn’t sleep now. Not with Rick here. She sat in the warm darkness, not wanting to move, watching the silent television, and listening to Rick breathe. She’d never sleep again, but that was all right. She felt different, as if she’d become something wide and calm and endless. She’d melted into an ocean. He’d done that, with his deft hands, and his clever tongue, and his… and before he left in the morning, she was going to make him do it all over again. Beth grinned.

What on earth was she watching? Some weird sci-fi movie. Odd—it never seemed to be that you could catch a B movie late at night any more, it was all infomercials. What a world we live in, she thought. Bad movies were bad, but so much better than some vomit called an infomercial.

Rick stirred, and she glanced down at him. He really was cute. Dr. Richard Townley. It was warm in the room; the fan wasn’t on. But she didn’t want to move to turn it on, or even to find the remote and change the channel. For some reason, Beth couldn’t seem to move at all. And it was okay. She watched 1960s Hollywood’s idea of scientists encountering space aliens. And not a woman among them, either, she noted. The earth scientists had stumbled upon an array that were supposed to be one thing, but had turned out to be weapons, reflecting the light of twin suns—

“Oh my god,” Beth said. She sat very still, and she thought. Finally, she could move. “Rick—wake up.”

He was sleepy and mumbling, but woke all the same, and said her name. “Beth. What—sorry—you want me go?”

“No. Listen. We thought they were all the same, all acting with the same information, all doing the same thing. They’re not. They’re all slightly different.” She knew she was babbling, but couldn’t stop herself. “I never saw it, you didn’t see it, even Fischer didn’t see it, but they can’t all be the same, each one is just slightly different, so what you see from one you can’t extrapolate and we’ve all been assuming they’re all identical!”

He was sitting up in her bed now, his hair tousled, and he looked years younger, and Beth felt a rush of warmth toward him, maybe even affection. Rick, she thought. That’s Dr. Townley from the lab. In my bed. The warmth deepened. And in me. Oh…

He was rising, too, unselfconscious even naked. “Show me,” he said. Beth watched him grab his shorts from the rug and slide them on, not bothering to find his boxers. He believed her.

She explained in the car on the way there. “It was the mirrors. They’re like the particles. Each mirror reflects something slightly differently. No mirror tells the whole truth. No piece of mirror shows the whole picture.”

Warm air rushed by the open windows. He didn’t answer, and Beth thought she had been wrong. “If you’re right,” he said. “If we look at them discretely… that could change everything. Our whole approach.”

“We’ll run a quick series of tests. Just to be sure I’m right. Then, tell the team.” They’ll think I’m joking, she thought. She didn’t say it aloud. If I tell them it was from watching Invasion from Planet Zyklon.

So I won’t.

They were at the lab, the campus calm and shadowed. “Dr. Fischer will be furious that it was you who figured it out,” Rick said, as he parked. The lot was deserted. “He’ll be in a bad mood for weeks.” Crickets sang in the dark.

“I don’t care,” Beth said. “That’s not our problem.”

“You’re right,” he said. He undid his seatbelt and leaned across to her. “Let’s go find out.”

Later, Rick whistled as he handed her the printouts. “Here we go. See it? You’re right. And don’t you dare downplay whose idea it was. It was yours.” He kissed her, slow and serious, and deep inside Beth, heat returned.

He set the printouts on the counter, and Beth exclaimed as he lifted her onto the nearest table. Rick kissed her again, and she was right. She was going to make him do it one more time before the morning. “But not,” she murmured, “in that lab coat. And those shorts.”

“What?”

“Nothing,” she said, stroking him, feeling the warmth of his skin, and the weight of his muscles. “I’m done joking.”

She stroked him until Rick made a low sound of pleasure. “Done joking. But not with fooling around, Dr. Townley.” Summer was short. She had all winter to read good books. And future Nobel winners didn’t need to play the lab clown.

[/spoiler]

Savannah

Walking home today I felt that shift happen.

That shift where, in a moment of clarity, you realise you now see the traveler as other. Let’s be clear that you are still just a traveler, you are just past the wide-eyed gawker stage.

That moment when you shift your gait and begin to walk with a sense of direction even if you are still mostly lost.

Because your lost is now different from before.

[spoiler]Before, five days ago, hallucinating Pluto, unable to quite process the truth that you have travelled thousands of miles over countries and oceans and somewhere during those ten hours someone snuck in an extra six and you wouldn’t think that a big deal until wave after wave of exhaustion hits you and your mind gives up and simply rides the tide until – walking home five days later you feel that shift happen.

This be the thought: I have knowledge of this city now. And yes, the biblical wink wink nudge nudge is intentional.

There was a moment a night or two past when we walked. We were walking to, I don’t know where, but suddenly the city was unrecognizable suddenly I looked around and I knew, this was the true city. Where I was, had been, am, is but a shiny exterior.

No, no ma’am just lights and wires. No need to look behind the curtains.

I wonder how many curtains I have to pull back to find…

Before I left, I was in a state of panic. I can admit that much. As if I could hide it. I wore it like a scarlet letter. A corset around my lungs and an unshakeable sense of impending doom seconds around a corner, sneaking up on me only to hide the moment I whip around, A-hah! Gotcha…

The panic exists because I am running away. The panic exists as a default reaction to change, a default reaction to self-improvement. Like an addict who will do any and every possible thing to avoid the initial horror of withdrawal. Because I can no longer sit in my room hiding behind curtains living my life, no, wasting my life away like millions of others staring into vapid voids and inside locked away is a little me screaming Get Out Get Out Get Out Now Can’t You See What’s Happening?

So I am running away and I am in a state of panic and this state of panic exists because I know I can be in such a state because I know that I have laid the foundation that will prevent me from retreating. I have threaded and woven and set out my loom. So now, because I have laid a solid foundation and put wheels in motion so that no matter how tight of chest, how completely totally unquestionably wriggling-out-of-my-skin anxious I get, I am going on this trip. I am running away.

I imagine a version of Dorothy Gale, frightened at the thought of losing Toto to that horrible Mrs. Gulch and her little bi-cycle too. Her one friend, her companion in life about to be taken away -

She packs light, just a picnic basket, I on the other hand, drowning in panic and fear pack far too much and then, with a little ditty about rainbows, we run out the door, through the farm, down the lane and over the bridge until we meet an old man cooking sausage over open flame.

…How does it go again? Ah, yes.

Hello, who are you, no don’t tell me… You’re travelling in disguise. No, that’s not right. I - you’re - you’re going on a visit. No, I’m wrong. That’s… You’re - running away"

I try to look like her, those doe eyes, years of amphetamines sparkling like supernovas, that little uncertain bite of the lip, long hours of filming bordering dangerously on an involuntary withdrawal.

I don’t think it works for me. The look… or the amphetamines.

Then, and then he looks at me - her -

*They don’t understand you at home. They don’t appreciate you. You want to see other lands - big cities - big mountains - big oceans -

Why,* we say, *it’s just like you could read what was inside of me
*

See me now, then, across the water far from the safety of my room, that screen, deathly blue light flickering and obliterating, my circus mirror into the world. Mirror into a world of false fantasy truths where the real reflection of who we are, the lights and wires behind the curtain are masked by photographs of smiling faces and Isn’t My Life Grand shouting into the wind.

See. Here I am now. On the other side of things. On the other side of the pond. On the other side of the panic. As I knew it would, as I walked through the gates, passed the checkpoints, boarded the miraculous metal birds of flight, I felt it. I felt the peeling away of the anxious panic-inducing corset of the mind. I felt a lightening of body mind and soul that, even before having left the tarmac, I knew made this whole journey worth it.

That room I was in with the curtained screens showing me only what I wanted to see, showing me only life as a weekly sitcom narrative arc. Weekly sitcoms of the lives of family, friends and never to be seen again acquaintances all seemingly produced by some sort of Fatalism Inc. production company run by three gals locked in a tower with their looms and skeins and why bother even trying why bother ever considering turning off the screen.

Now that I’m here I’m dreaming vivid instantly dissipating jet-lag dreams. In one dream I come upon a wall. Thick slabs of cement cracking with age and vines and honeysuckle working their way up and around, an act of fatalism perhaps, defying our attempts to impose order, logic and control on our lives.

I trip over something and fall. A root. No, a cable, and what was invisible before now surrounds me. Cables running out from inside the tower. A manufactured imitation of the audacious climbing plants.

I blink and the genius of dream logic transports me to clanky echoing rickety stairs circling up to infinity and it’s as if I’m moving in images until I blink again and I’m there.

The top of the tower.

The cables end here too and they lie thick on the ground, my step becoming cautious as the ground itself becomes treacherous. The sound, the feeling, is intensely inhuman, otherworldly. Mechanical. Instantly affecting me, changing me and I stumble, I fall bounce up and fall again.

Panic. Drowning. That box there. That button. Reach it. Push it.

I drag myself but that blasted dream logic fights back and I move without gaining distance endless rows of screens throwing back images at me. Throwing images at such a violent pace that I feel a tightness of breath, an increasing crushing invisible weight of anger and ego, of platitude and passivity of – no NO –

I fight for control and, blink, I am there.

The switch is flipped.

The fans wind down. The screens goes blue to grey to black and and -

I look up at the curtains disappearing up the wall like the morning tide, the light pouring in, the power shutting down, the screens going blank becoming void, reflecting only the sun - the world outside – and – and I can breathe again.

Nothing has changed just - nothing has changes just my world seems a little bigger again.

Nothing has changed just my breath seems a little deeper and I see myself reflected in the screen and I see behind me - I see behind me all the possible life that is waiting yet for me to live and I had been ignoring it and then I wake up and I am in a new city.

I wake up and I am out of my cave and I can breathe.

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slackbaby

Shelley stared at the 30 identical faces of David looking at her, she was a little sleepy and after a small yawn and her hand rubbing her eye she managed to say with some loudness:

“Thank you for knocking me up today David.”

David’s face turned as red as beet, in a low voice he said “Uh, miss Shelley, I’m afraid that doesn’t mean the same in America as in England.”

[spoiler]Shelley just remembered that while “knock me up” means “wake me up” for a British person, it doesn’t mean that for an American, David now saw 30 very red faced Shelley faces staring at him. Luckily the rest of the American group they were traveling with had stepped out of the room where interactive mirrors moved by industrial like robots were in exhibition.

Outside, when the 2 had gone closer to the museum group, one old fellow said in passing to David:

“Nice going kids!”

Both David and Shelley wanted to die just there in the Mexican museum.

Shelley was a young member of the team of inventors that worked for Swarmtools corp fresh out of the department of engineering at Cambridge. So far Shelly was relieved that this art exhibit was not designed to hit unsuspecting patrons with mace or to taser them, Shelley had seen this artist’s exhibitions before, many had an element of danger or risk to the spectators. While some artists preferred quiet settings, Shelley was afraid that Calderon was on his way to becoming an evil Christo.

“Was that the French artist that covered the Reichstag with a huge silver tarp and surrounded several islands with red? That was weird but cool.” David said to Shelley’s talk about Calderon.

“We are not here to admire art, Mr. Latin lover. We have come to learn if the reports are true that this artist is not a front for something sinister. We have the right under contract to take the swarm of robots away from him if he is breaking the contract.

There is precedent for that, under the contract our clients have a clause against making deadly products, there was the case of a bloke that began to 3d print gun parts with no license; even before the federal authorities arrived, the makers of the 3d printer confiscated the printers because the users broke their contract, so before the United States or other federal agencies get the idea to also limit robotic swarm development like they limited the 3d print people, we have to enforce our contracts, and it does not matter if the one renting our products is an old friend of the boss.”

“A friend, that if that warning from a local is accurate, has been burning more than just ants, but even a suspiciously fire that consumed a Honeysuckle tree close to the museum looks like it had a very mundane explanation” David said. “Now, for how long we have to keep investigating? I thought that by now we could be back in California and at least getting engaged.”

“Don’t push your luck, we have to keep it as professional as possible, it was just pure happenstance that the boss assigned you to be my aid in Mexico as you know the place, but you also know that we both could be fired if the boss discovers that we are banging around and out of wedlock, you know how old fashioned she is.”

Calderon based the exhibition on a previous work from the Random International, a London Based collective. In the original exhibition around 2009, a member of the audience could walk into the area of the exhibit that had little rolling robots that detected the audience members and followed them around moving their face size mirrors to show an individual audience member their own faces, the effect was like if a crowd of onlookers was looking at a single audience member.

Calderon took that idea and made it bigger and better, unfortunately there were suspicions that Calderon had connections with drug cartel and terror groups and so Shelley’s team was sent.

Back in the resort villa, Shelley and David pretended to be a loving couple on vacation… well, that was the idea back at the home office, but the high end notebook computers checking automatically at the high definition video they took in secret were not being monitored constantly, Shelley and David were more not looking at that, they were not just pretending to be a married couple then…

Still, David looked up for a moment from under the sheets, and noticed that one of the advanced analyzer programs was flashing on the screen as something odd had been detected. David got out of the bed and sat down naked on the seat in front of the monitor looking closely.

Shelley did follow him in a very angry mood.“Hey, get over there! I was not finished yet! You bloody…” Luckily for David’s health, Shelley then noticed the same warning in the screen.

“Yes, that unit all the way to the left” it does not have our trademark, and it looks different…”
Shelley looked and got even better views from the extremely high definition video they took in secret when they visited the exhibition. “Investigate and find the maker of that piece that is different from the others”.

“Yes, honey”.

After a quick semi-playful smack to the back of David’s head:

“Don’t honey me yet”, there is a lot of work to do. Get your clothes on”.

Now it was David’s turn to be frustrated, he knew that when Shelley gets into a hunt, she will not do anything fun until it is finished, it had been easy for David with her so far because she had found nothing until now to suspect Calderon.

After a closer inspection of that odd robot in the exhibition was made in secret at night, it was found that the manufacturers of several pieces of the robot copy had been also connected to international crime groups.

A quick trip back to the resort-hotel and a report to headquarters put all into high alert mode.

The connections the boss had in the USA and Mexico put together a team of local police and repo-men quickly, they did follow Shelley and David with Swarmtool impound notices and warrants allowing them to take away all the robots in the exhibition and in other locations belonging to Calderon, but as soon as they walked into the huge room where the exhibition was, nothing was inside.

Except a very small robot that walked quietly to Shelley carrying a small letter in his clamp like hand.

Shelley read the letter in a hurry and angrily screamed.

“Bollocks!”


The first police boats did not get too far, as soon as they appeared in sight of the island the boat began to get one section of it smoking and then it bursted into flames, by then the officers had jumped overboard but some were seriously burned.

“Oh, for heaven’s sake, captain, you have to let me try!” Shelley told the police captain.

“Miss, you know that it is too dangerous, and yes, we thank you for your tracing system allowing us to quickly find out where Calderon was, but now this is more than just a repossession issue, Calderon is using the swarm of robots with the mirrors as a weapon and already has destroyed 2 police boats and injured a few police officers. We think it is safe to wait for the air force to come and at least bomb the positions where those robots are or wait for the night to come”

Shelley looked at her tablet and showed a series of images to the captain. Shelley then said:

“But, the information we got tells us that many of the swarm bots are being moved to the other side of the isle, where we suspect that there is a personal submarine dock. He will escape soon and more than just mirror controlling robots could fall in the hands of criminals. You have to give me a fast boat. And access to a good transmitter.”

After explaining, the captain understood, he was not completely sure yet, but orders from above came just then to give Shelley what she needed.

With binoculars the captain looked at the fast boat sliding to the isle, he expected David and Shelly to begin to burn, and it got warm for David as he remained in front of Sheley protecting her from any heat, but for him it warmed just enough to get a tan.

Just as planned the swarm bots refused to follow the instructions of Calderon and were in disarray, a good number of them still followed his instructions but they were not numerous enough to organize and focus enough solar radiation to do any damage.

After a signal from David, other patrol boats navigated to the island and the policemen looked amused at the sight of most of the robots now moving to restrain the few that were not following the new orders from their super administrator.

“Thank goodness for the radio back door we added, good thing that the ones that said that it was not needed were outvoted in the development team.” Shelly thought as she jumped to the shore of the island.

After a few minutes the officers surrounded Calderon in a room in his villa and handcuffed him and took him to one of the boats and back to the mainland, in the boat Shelley was standing on the front upper deck and looked down on Calderon.

“Oh there you are Miss” Calderon defiantly said. “I guess you got my note, silly for you to come unannounced to get a closer look to one of our duplicates added to the exhibition by mistake, It told me that it was time to retire from art.”

“And you decided to use our invention as a weapon, breaking the contract, and not only that, you harmed people.”

“Well, I was curious, there were doubts that Arquimedes burned the Roman vessels back in the days of the Roman Empire, hard to have precise control of all the mirrors, but your invention made it possible. It was beautiful, a great performance for the art or warfare to see how the great Arquimedes would had been even greater with the tools of today.

“Yeah,“ Shelley said in an even more determined voice “but you forgot that even though Archimedes is remembered as one of the old time greats, back then the Roman soldier that took his life would had seen Archimedes as a war criminal after seeing many of his fellow soldiers die. You got that Calderon?”

“Eureka… eureka… “ He exclaimed in lower tones while turning into fatalism and acceptance of his fate as the police was taking him to the shore.


Back in the resort, Shelley was filing the last report on the issue when David came in with some bottles of sunburn cream, and ready to take a cold shower. Not much interest in romance then.

In the morning, David was feeling better and moved closer to the still sleeping Shelley.

“Time to knock you up!” David said playfully.

Shelley did open her eyes and said in a groggy and wicked voice:

“Too late, you funny bastard… and I was “knocked up” in the American sense”. Shelley just then opened her eyes more and put her hand in her mouth as it dawned on her that she was not ready to say that to David yet.

Now it was a very pale face of David that stared at Shelley. “Huh, that dark burn in your face lightened quickly”, said Shelley with a fake smile while failing to change the subject.

They were married the next day, at least there was no confusion when she mentioned “Shotgun wedding?” to David. It has the same meaning in the US as in Britain.
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GIGObuster

The four of us drove out to the county carnival in Joe’s car, early Saturday morning.

I took a deep breath of the fresh air, full of honeysuckle, as we rattled down the country road, and didn’t even feel like a tag-along. Drew and his friends are cool guys, and since they called me over to their table as that frosh party was winding down, I’ve been confused about exactly what they see in a skinny geek like me. Whatever it is they want from me, I want to be that for them, as best I can. But at least I’ve learned not to change my mind three times in an hour about what the expectations are. That just makes me look like a real space case.

[spoiler]The spring morning was cool as Joe parked and we piled out of the car in every direction, but the carnival grounds were already pretty crowded with other college students. Drew led the way, spending an hour and a half playing the rigged games and buying us all carnie food. I had icing sugar on my face from the funnel cake when Scotty called, “Hey, there’s Chastity’s court!” The way I’ve heard the story, Drew’s been flirting with Chastity Buchanan for a year now, and vice versa, but they still haven’t hooked up. After winter break, Chastity started hanging out with three other girls, and since the four of us go everywhere together, Joe added up two and two, getting an answer he liked.

I tried to clean up as Drew led the way one more time. Scotty nudged my elbow and pointed at Anne Fletcher, the shy one with the short blonde ponytail, as if I didn’t already know what my role was here. I smiled with as much shy charm as I could manage and waved at Anne. She blushed and waved back while Chastity got her flirt on.

“We passed the funhouse on the way over,” Hope said once her queen bee gave her an opportunity to speak.

“Lame,” Drew snapped, but Chastity gave him a look that was strong enough to make him reconsider. “Okay, we can give it a try if you want.”

There weren’t many people in front of us in the line for the funhouse, and the carnie with the bright red shirt and black beard suggested that we wait a few minutes for everybody else to clear out so that we could go in at the same time. While we were waiting, Joe pushed me over toward Anne. “Hey,” I mumbled. “How’re you doing?”

“It’s a good day, so far, Will,” she said. “Even better since you got here.”

“Thanks.” Even when she says things like that, I can’t figure out how Anne sees me, what I’m supposed to be to her. When I try to be what the guys expect, a smooth talking pickup artist who sweeps her off her feet, it just doesn’t come together. Anne never stops smiling at me even when it’s not working, but she doesn’t pick me up out of sympathy either.

I had hardly turned to look for some sort of inspiration on my next conversational gambit when a bunch of teenagers filed out of the funhouse with weird looks on their faces. “That should be it,” the carnie said, closing the door that they’d come out of. “Enjoy!”

We filed in two by two, Drew and Chastity leading. Anne and I brought up the rear. I heard a little shriek; not Chastity, probably Hope, and a lot of chuckling. “Come on, isn’t that what you expected out of a funhouse?” Drew asked.

“Yeah, but I didn’t expect it to make me look that fat.” Yeah, that was the sound of Hope complaining.

“Come on.” I caught a glimpse of Drew taking Charity by the hand, and something seemed odd for a second until I realized that we were seeing them in mirrors too; just ordinary mirrors on the walls as far as I could tell, and then the two of them disappeared around an acute angle and they were gone.

“Fuckin’ Hell!” Scotty slammed on the mirror five feet away for me, making a horrendous crash that set my eardrums rattling. “How’d you get that tape, dirty carnie? How’d you rig up a mirror to play it? Is it reflecting a video screen out of sight somewhere?”

“Scott!” Joe hurried over to him. “It’s just a mirror, man; I can see you and Willy boy in it.” Joe waved at me as if that proved everything he wanted to tell Scott. Scott apparently thought differently. Before Joe had finished his gesture, Scott’s fist was driving into Joe’s nose. Bianca yelped, and Anne made a sort of strangled sound, bolting for the way we’d come in. I was tempted to run for it with her, but that wasn’t what the guys would expect of me, even if Scott was apparently crazy and Drew had disappeared with a girl. So I hurried up behind Scott and grabbed his arms before he could throw another punch. But he snarled in frustration at realizing that those mighty biceps were restrained and swung his body backwards, slamming me into the mirror hard.

I guess Scott rang my clock on the glass; I don’t remember what happened next. The next thing that was clear was sitting down with my back still up against the mirrored funhouse wall, and listening to Scott and Joe talking nearby. “I’m sorry, man; I was just so surprised to see it here that I guess I lost control. I didn’t realize anybody knew about that day in the abandoned building, and I really don’t think there’s a videotape. Maybe the carnies are putting some kind of weird gas into the air.”

“What happened, what did you really see?” Joe asked. Scott growled, and I realized it would be good to change the subject, since that question might set Scott off again.

“We need to get out of here,” I said. “And we need to get Drew and the girls out too. Do you have any idea where they went?”

Scott and Joe traded a look. “You take care of Anne,” Joe said, pointing past me. “She took off that way.” And before I could stop them, they turned around and hurried the other way down the twisting path of mirrors.

“What gave you the notion to split up?” I called out. “Haven’t you ever seen a fuckin’ movie? Morons.” But then it occurred to me that I might be egging Scott’s temper on myself, and I didn’t want to chase after them and leave Anne behind. The carnie with the beard would have closed the door that we came in by, after all, and the exit had to be far away in the maze of mirrored walls. It wouldn’t be fun otherwise.

I only made it around one turn before I heard a mirror moan. It was one of those wavy and wobbly ones that made my reflection bulge and narrow in very strange places. “Hey, don’t pull that crap with me,” I muttered under my breath. After what happened to Scott, I wasn’t about to give these mirrors any slack.

“Umm, why not?” a voice came back. “I’m kind of having a hard time here.”

I squinted at my reflection, trying to figure out how this fit into what Scott had described. “What kind of a hard time?”

“Well, my reflection is still lightening, you know, getting paler? Not just me but the background too. In a minute or so it’s going to be too hard to look at.”

That didn’t make sense, and then I placed the voice. “Bianca?”

“Yeah, what? How’d you know my name, carnie?”

For a second, I was thinking of how to explain who I really was, and then realized it didn’t matter. If she wanted me to be a carnie… “That doesn’t matter right now, Miss. The funhouse isn’t safe. You need to leave now.”

“Okay; how? This is a really good maze, and I couldn’t even keep track of Hope when we were trying to vamoose together.”

I didn’t have a good answer for that, so I just headed off to look for Anne again. There was only one way to go for a minute - where had Drew and Chastity snuck off? I couldn’t see that acute branch anywhere.

And then I bumped into a pane of glass. For a second I thought it was a two-way transparent wall; so that you could see another part of the funhouse maze without being able to get there straight away—or maybe a one-way mirror so that you could spy on somebody else without them seeing you. But then I realized that it was even stranger.

It was a mirror, except it didn’t reflect me. I could see the reflection of a cigarette butt that somebody had dropped against the far wall. I could see the reflection of the scuff of footprints on the floor. Out of sheer curiosity, I dropped a penny, and its reflection sort of appeared in midair and clattered to the ground.

“What the heck?” I said to the empty funhouse near me. “I’m not a freaking vampire, so show my reflection already.”

There was a weird shift in the mirrors, but no reflection of myself appeared before me. In fact, as I turned around, I realized that I was surrounded by mirrors that refused to reflect me now; four of them, trapping me without any way to get out, unless I could climb above them, and they seemed to stretch terribly high.

What was going on here? Something was bugging me about the situation. Since talking had created a change in the funhouse, I opened my mouth again, hoping that I wouldn’t make things worse.

“Mirrors show the truth, is that it? Bianca’s brighter than she gives herself credit for; Scott is refusing to see what his past mistakes mean. So for me, what does it mean that the mirrors think I’m not here?” I thought for a second. “That I act like I’m a reflection already? Ever since I got to school, I’ve been terrified of acting like myself, I just live up to what somebody else sees in me? To hell with that fatalism. I don’t know who I am yet, but I’m done with being an echo.”

There was another change, and the mirrors went away—no, that’s not it. There were still mirrors in the old building that the carnies had turned into their funhouse, but they weren’t big wall size mirrors anymore. Just hundreds of little mirrors a foot or two square, all mounted on stands that sat upon the floor. And the eight of us stood above the mirrors that had been trapping us. I looked around at the girls and smiled.

Anne was nice enough, but I probably wasn’t secure enough in my own individuality to date her and be sure that I was doing it for myself. And there was probably a reason that we hadn’t been able to work things out when the guys had been pushing me. So I turned to Bianca. “Hey, do you want to go get some ice cream cones?”

Bianca blinked and smiled. “Sure, I’d like that.” She gestured for me to come along and headed towards the open door.

“Hey!” Joe complained, but I just walked by and he didn’t object again. I knew that he didn’t have anything with Bianca but high hopes.

I wasn’t sure if I’d like who Bianca was behind the reflection she showed the world, but there was only one way to find out.
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chrisk

Just want to say I’ve read the first three so far.

By the time I consume the rest, the poll should be up, and I’ll start posing my thoughts on all of them. Already, this might be my favorite contest of the 3 I have participated in…

This time I’m trying really hard to offer critiques of each story, and I do heartily welcome critiques of mine. It is so helpful to have fresh eyes on one’s work, and see it through the reader’s perspective. I’ll post my critiques after the contest closes. (This is my way of making me follow through with that effort, as I really appreciate when people comment on what works and what doesn’t!) As always, I’m impressed by the imaginative response to the prompts that I’ve seen so far.

Likewise. But I’m just a total ameture, so my critiques are pretty valueless. But I do like a good, here’s what worked/what didn’t. Even if you tell me it was he equivalent of smelling a fart. I’m not phased by such things. Besides, I wanna know just how bad my farts stink!

Fart metaphors are the sweetest poetry, aren’t they?

The poll is established; please, read and enjoy. And then, vote!

It is a multiple-choice poll, so you may vote for as many or as few stories as you wish. It’s a secret ballot, so no one need ever know how you voted.

I’d also like to open the floor to comments on the various stories. This is actually a valuable opportunity for both our writers and our readers - it’s quite interesting to hear what was clear and what was difficult to understand, what was straightforward and what was unexpected. And it’s also interesting to hear what the writers had in mind.

And above all, congratulations to our writers for their creativity under pressure.
…but don’t forget to vote!

Givin this a bump… Some good ones, people…

Rosé Reflections, post #3
Short but sweet. Very writerly. Needed to be developed more.

Shards, post #4
A simple but fun story. I don’t think grandma could have both her grand kids parents unless there’s some incest going on… I also wasn’t sure what the point of The Flowers of The Lord was, it never ended up affecting the story other than I guess to shoehorn in the keywords. There needed to be a little bit more point to the story.

Magic, post #5
Hey, everyone has middle names! Great mystery, and clever solution. All the pieces fit together well. I did find myself wanting at least a throwaway line or two about why the relationship had gone so bad as to both inspire murder and make her an obvious suspect. This got my vote.

Chevrefoil, post #7
I laughed at “fly’s dick”, very colorful. I love the time travel element, and the idea of an older story being the clue that saves the day. But I didn’t quite get how the tally worked in the original story, or how knowing that they had repeated the loop several times was going to save his life. But it still got my vote.

The metafiction detective and the case of the catoptric algorithm cosmorama post #8
This was fun to write, so much that I wrote like 4000 words lol. I had to basically chop out 50% of it, but hopefully the core of it survived. I can send the original version to anyone who’s interested. I spent so much time editing just for length that I didn’t get a chance to do a pass to clean up the run on sentences and other clunky bits. Obvious vote.

Show Me, post #9
Well written, and moving. I always enjoy stories of people finding creative solutions while inspired by love. Got my vote.

The state of panic, post #10
Well written in terms of the specific imagery, but the story as a whole was a bit abstract. She’s a tourist? She’s running away? She’s dreaming? She’s hallucinating on drugs? Not sure exactly what was happening, or where it all led to. Needs to be a little more concrete.

The Army of Archimedes, post #11
Cute, if a bit haphazard. I like the idea of using an art installation to wreak havoc. The romantic subplot was nicely drawn. Needs some editing, and maybe to be a little less comic booky.

Not a Fun House, post #12
Interesting, and surprising. Well drawn characters and development. I thought that his outburst about splitting up was out of character though. Got my vote.

General comments
Some common themes, the mirrors as art installation, and as a focuser of light, new religions, detectives, physics experiments, confusion between lightning and lightening, love (or bromance) between scientists…Great job all!

According to the poll at least six other people read all the stories. Lets hear some critiques! :smiley:

I still can’t vote as I still haven’t been able to pick up where i left off, been swamped with work, but plan to finish by tomorrow! (And thanks for the vote, jackdavinci, but more so for your honest thoughts. Can’t wait to chime in on everything…