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Old 03-20-2020, 10:18 PM
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Is it a request for information, with a whole bunch of rhetoric added to make if more confusing? Or is it the text of a speech, telling them what your concerns are, with some rhetorical questions?

If it's the first, cut out the rhetoric and just ask the questions.

If it's the second, well written, but a bit long for me.