# Anyone want to read my first short sci fi story? **URL:** \ **Category:** Cafe Society\ **Created:** [April 28, 2003, 8:17pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762 "2003-04-28T20:17:15Z")\ **Posts on this page:** 20\ **Page:** 1
**Author:** ![dorkusmalorkusmafia](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/dorkusmalorkusmafia/32/7266_2.png) [@dorkusmalorkusmafia](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/dorkusmalorkusmafia)\ **Post date:** [April 28, 2003, 8:17pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/1 "2003-04-28T20:17:15Z")
It is definately a short story being 3 pages long. I want some honest critiquing. If you are interested, post here and I will send it to you. ---
**Author:** ![CaptMurdock](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/captmurdock/32/11736_2.png) [@CaptMurdock](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/CaptMurdock)\ **Post date:** [April 28, 2003, 8:32pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/2 "2003-04-28T20:32:39Z")
sure send me it. My husband and I both read the stuff and we love to write short stuff. ---
**Author:** ![Sock\_Munkey](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/s/aeb1de/32.png) [@Sock\_Munkey](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Sock_Munkey)\ **Post date:** [April 28, 2003, 8:37pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/3 "2003-04-28T20:37:46Z")
I’d like to give it a look as well, fair warning though, I can be a real bas\*ard when ic comes to commenting on literature. ---
**Author:** ![dorkusmalorkusmafia](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/dorkusmalorkusmafia/32/7266_2.png) [@dorkusmalorkusmafia](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/dorkusmalorkusmafia)\ **Post date:** [April 28, 2003, 8:50pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/4 "2003-04-28T20:50:34Z")
I forwarded it off to you CaptMurdock. Sock Monkey won’t be getting it anytime soon unless he posts an email address where I can mail it. As it stands now, I haven’t edited it for grammar yet so anything along that line would be good. Also, please point out any hole that I can close up to make it a nice succinct little story. ---
**Author:** ![foolsguinea](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/foolsguinea/32/14751_2.png) [@foolsguinea](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/foolsguinea)\ **Post date:** [April 28, 2003, 9:08pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/5 "2003-04-28T21:08:50Z")
OK. At the moment, the email linked to by the SDMB works. But hurry, or it may lapse again. ---
**Author:** ![dorkusmalorkusmafia](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/dorkusmalorkusmafia/32/7266_2.png) [@dorkusmalorkusmafia](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/dorkusmalorkusmafia)\ **Post date:** [April 28, 2003, 9:17pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/6 "2003-04-28T21:17:24Z")
Foolsguinea, it is on its way. CaptMurdock, the email attached to your profile bounced back. ---
**Author:** ![dorkusmalorkusmafia](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/dorkusmalorkusmafia/32/7266_2.png) [@dorkusmalorkusmafia](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/dorkusmalorkusmafia)\ **Post date:** [April 28, 2003, 9:53pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/7 "2003-04-28T21:53:42Z")
If anyone posts after this, I will send them the story close to 10pm eastern. ---
**Author:** ![CaptMurdock](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/captmurdock/32/11736_2.png) [@CaptMurdock](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/CaptMurdock)\ **Post date:** [April 28, 2003, 10:00pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/8 "2003-04-28T22:00:35Z")
try [clioster@earthlink.net](mailto:clioster@earthlink.net) ---
**Author:** ![Scupper](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/s/b9bd4f/32.png) [@Scupper](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Scupper)\ **Post date:** [April 28, 2003, 10:40pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/9 "2003-04-28T22:40:03Z")
Send it on over. My SDMB email should work (I get subscribed thread messages). ---
**Author:** ![RealityChuck](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/realitychuck/32/195_2.png) [@RealityChuck](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/RealityChuck)\ **Post date:** [April 28, 2003, 11:38pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/10 "2003-04-28T23:38:21Z")
You can send it to me at [sf\_writer@yahoo.com](mailto:sf_writer@yahoo.com). Be forwarned – I critique at a pro level (I write SF profesionally). I’m not a bastard, but I will point out what is wrong with it. ---
**Author:** ![dorkusmalorkusmafia](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/dorkusmalorkusmafia/32/7266_2.png) [@dorkusmalorkusmafia](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/dorkusmalorkusmafia)\ **Post date:** [April 29, 2003, 1:49am UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/11 "2003-04-29T01:49:30Z")
Ok, everyone before RealityChuck should have it save for Sock Monkey who has no email on his profile. I am just writing this for fun and it was my first lapse into Sci Fi. Be as brutal as you want. Point out plotholes (it is a short story…3 pages), etc. Thanks for looking into it. If I do anything particularly well or particularly bad, please point those out too. Thanks again. ---
**Author:** ![MusicJunkie](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/m/df788c/32.png) [@MusicJunkie](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/MusicJunkie)\ **Post date:** [April 29, 2003, 3:24am UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/12 "2003-04-29T03:24:30Z")
Mine is vdgg@bol.com.br and if you’d send it to me I’d like to read it. ---
**Author:** ![Hometownboy](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/h/5e9695/32.png) [@Hometownboy](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Hometownboy)\ **Post date:** [April 29, 2003, 4:54am UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/13 "2003-04-29T04:54:33Z")
I’d also like a peek at it; I’m a 40-year SF fan and a newspaper copy editor by profession, though I’ll try not to criticize lapses from AP style. [rnichols@eaglenewspapers.com](mailto:rnichols@eaglenewspapers.com) ---
**Author:** ![green\_bladder](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/g/73ab20/32.png) [@green\_bladder](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/green_bladder)\ **Post date:** [April 29, 2003, 5:03am UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/14 "2003-04-29T05:03:30Z")
Let’s go, I love sci-fi 🙂 [green\_bladder@yahoo.com](mailto:green_bladder@yahoo.com) (if it isn’t on my profile) ---
**Author:** ![Sock\_Munkey](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/s/aeb1de/32.png) [@Sock\_Munkey](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Sock_Munkey)\ **Post date:** [April 29, 2003, 5:03am UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/15 "2003-04-29T05:03:50Z")
Oops, my fault. [stick17man@yahoo.com](mailto:stick17man@yahoo.com) ---
**Author:** ![vivalostwages](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/v/d07c76/32.png) [@vivalostwages](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/vivalostwages)\ **Post date:** [April 29, 2003, 5:06am UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/16 "2003-04-29T05:06:26Z")
Please send it to me; I’d love to read it. You can email me via my profile. ---
**Author:** ![Firx](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/f/c2a13f/32.png) [@Firx](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Firx)\ **Post date:** [April 29, 2003, 6:03am UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/17 "2003-04-29T06:03:34Z")
I’d also very much like to read it, please. pandelume@mail.utexas.edu ---
**Author:** ![Rythefly](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/r/d07c76/32.png) [@Rythefly](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Rythefly)\ **Post date:** [April 29, 2003, 10:17am UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/18 "2003-04-29T10:17:13Z")
I would love to read it if you would like to email me: [rphd123@charter.net](mailto:rphd123@charter.net) I can’t promise a wonderfully insightful critique but I’ll do my best. ---
**Author:** ![dorkusmalorkusmafia](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/dorkusmalorkusmafia/32/7266_2.png) [@dorkusmalorkusmafia](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/dorkusmalorkusmafia)\ **Post date:** [April 29, 2003, 2:33pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/19 "2003-04-29T14:33:50Z")
CaptMurdock, that email still didn’t work. Everyone up to Rythefly has been sent a copy. ---
**Author:** ![Aro](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/a/b3f665/32.png) [@Aro](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Aro)\ **Post date:** [April 29, 2003, 2:46pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/20 "2003-04-29T14:46:01Z")
Can you add me to the list of curious. Thanks. E-mail in profile. [Next page](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762.md?page=2)