# Anyone want to read my first short sci fi story? **URL:** \ **Category:** Cafe Society\ **Created:** [April 28, 2003, 8:17pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762 "2003-04-28T20:17:15Z")\ **Posts on this page:** 8\ **Page:** 3
**Author:** ![thi6](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/t/e99b99/32.png) [@thi6](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/thi6)\ **Post date:** [April 30, 2003, 7:24pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/41 "2003-04-30T19:24:43Z")
May I read it, too, please? My email is [thi6@yahoo.com](mailto:thi6@yahoo.com) ---
**Author:** ![dorkusmalorkusmafia](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/dorkusmalorkusmafia/32/7266_2.png) [@dorkusmalorkusmafia](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/dorkusmalorkusmafia)\ **Post date:** [April 30, 2003, 7:43pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/42 "2003-04-30T19:43:27Z")
It has been sent, thi6. I am undergoing some changes now thanks to the only set of feedback I have received so far. Please provide me feedback you guys, it isn’t that long. I am interested in unanswered questions, grammar, and plot holes. If some of my pseudo-science doesn’t make a lick of sense, I want to hear about that too. ---
**Author:** ![Estilicon](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/e/848f3c/32.png) [@Estilicon](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Estilicon)\ **Post date:** [April 30, 2003, 8:00pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/43 "2003-04-30T20:00:49Z")
Count me in, I think my e-mail is in my profile. It’s [frdezavalia@hotmail.com](mailto:frdezavalia@hotmail.com) ---
**Author:** ![sturmhauke](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/s/e47c2d/32.png) [@sturmhauke](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/sturmhauke)\ **Post date:** [May 1, 2003, 12:49am UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/44 "2003-05-01T00:49:16Z")
[sturmhauke@attbi.com](mailto:sturmhauke@attbi.com) Fire all mail torpedoes! On second thought, just send a subspace message. ---
**Author:** ![dorkusmalorkusmafia](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/dorkusmalorkusmafia/32/7266_2.png) [@dorkusmalorkusmafia](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/dorkusmalorkusmafia)\ **Post date:** [May 1, 2003, 2:36pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/45 "2003-05-01T14:36:28Z")
Sent to Estilicon and sturmhauke. Please provide constructive criticism that maintains in the scope of short fiction. I a question arises that seems integral to the story, please point it out. ---
**Author:** ![Dunderman](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/d/ecb155/32.png) [@Dunderman](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Dunderman)\ **Post date:** [May 6, 2003, 12:12pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/46 "2003-05-06T12:12:02Z")
> [@](#): > > \*Originally posted by dorkusmalorkusmafia \* > **And it has been sent to Priceguy too.** Sorry to bump this, but I haven’t seen it. Did you send it to pls@claymore.nu? ---
**Author:** ![dorkusmalorkusmafia](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/dorkusmalorkusmafia/32/7266_2.png) [@dorkusmalorkusmafia](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/dorkusmalorkusmafia)\ **Post date:** [May 6, 2003, 2:49pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/47 "2003-05-06T14:49:21Z")
Priceguy, I thought I sent it there. It didn’t bounce back. I am sending it there again. ---
**Author:** ![Sock\_Munkey](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/s/aeb1de/32.png) [@Sock\_Munkey](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Sock_Munkey)\ **Post date:** [May 6, 2003, 7:10pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762/48 "2003-05-06T19:10:57Z")
IIRC Hans Morovec and Fred Pohl once collaborated on a story based on a similar concept. [Previous page](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/anyone-want-to-read-my-first-short-sci-fi-story/171762.md?page=2)