clayton_e
You may well know about this already, but if not, this searchable online 1984 ought to be pretty useful for checking biographical details.
Obvious typos apart, I’ve only one broad reaction what you’ve shown us so far; remember that you’re telling this from Julia’s viewpoint and mindset. Julia is young, streetwise, cynical, and doesn’t care about books. She’s going to think about the world in different terms from Winston Smith, and maybe you could reflect this stylistically. For comparison, check out Holden Caulfield, or Alex from A Clockwork Orange. Their authors don’t go into expositions like “Below the title was a drawing of a man’s face, the corners of his mouth … etc etc … of those impressions could exist”. They concentrate on telling how the character perceives the world, not laying on us great chunks of ‘authorese’ describing at length things the characters would scarcely notice.