I, too, enjoy the books – but I have several nitpicks. Some are minor, and some are major believability issues, in my mind. Not believability in terms of “oh, magic isn’t real…” but believability in the sense of how things would happen and motivation of the characters, etc.
HP1: Sorcerer’s Stone – Wandering around at night after bedtime is forbidden, and the kids get caught in Hagrid’s hut (reported by Draco), so they get detention. Doing what? Running a little errand in the Friggin Forbidden Forest… AT NIGHT… AFTER BEDTIME. Hello?
Just a wee bit hard to believe that a school will punish kids by sending them out to do more of the things that are forbidden and what they are getting punished for in the first place.
HP2: Chamber of Secrets – my main one is about Hermione, and how she “solved” the mystery of the creature, before getting petrified. Yes, she’s very smart. Yes, she does all her reading assignments. Yes, she reads everything else she can get her hands on, too. Yes, we get it.
Hermione figures out what the creature is because of something she remembered reading in the library. Never mind that early in the book, when I first saw that victims were being petrified, my first thought was “basilisk”. My believability issue here comes from the fact that Hermione figures it out so easily, but it’s stumped Dumbledore and other teachers for 50 years! Dumbledore, who is certainly as well-read as Hermione, if not more.
HP3: Prisoner of Azkaban: I have a couple of major ones here. And most of it revolves around the Marauder’s Map.
I really like the idea of the Marauder’s Map. I really do. I think it’s clever, and fun, and I love that Fred and George have been using it to assist in their mischief for the last couple of years. BUT… it causes some serious believability issues for me.
Here’s the big one. Remember how Lupin was looking at the map and realized something, and came after the kids (under the invisibility cloak, getting ready to head to the secret door under the whomping willow…)? He followed them because of something he SAW ON THE MAP – Peter Pettigrew’s name. Remember, of course, how the map tracks the location of people on the map boundaries and lists their NAME. That’s how Lupin realized that Pettigrew was an animagus (hiding as Ron’s rat, Scabbers).
SO… Am I supposed to believe that Fred and George, who possessed the map for two or three years before giving it to Harry, NEVER noticed the name of Peter Pettigrew on the map – and the fact that this person’s name always appeared next to Ron’s name – and never once wondered who the hell this Peter guy was?
The map is great, but remember, Fred and George have been using it a while – they would SEE some secrets on the thing.
Another issue with the map. Harry and Hermione time travel back a bit, so for a few hours, there are TWO Harrys and TWO Hermiones in the area. I do like how she treated the time travel – not the Star Trekky changing the timeline notion, but rather the idea that the events happen the same both times, and the characters are just experiencing them from different perspectives. HOWEVER… Won’t both copies of Harry and Hermione show up on the map? And Lupin, who was looking at the map around the time, didn’t notice this? And SNAPE, who came in and saw the map after Lupin left, didn’t notice this and wonder… “What the F…?!”
HP4 – my main nitpick for this is the obvious one. Why the elaborate charade of the tournament, when fake Moody could have just made something else (besides the cup), into a portkey and get Harry to touch it after class…?