# Please review my screenplay to boost my competition chances

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**Created:** [December 10, 2010, 9:44pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/please-review-my-screenplay-to-boost-my-competition-chances/563707 "2010-12-10T21:44:34Z")\
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**Author:** ![Lakai](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/l/9de0a6/32.png) [@Lakai](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Lakai)\
**Post date:** [January 17, 2011, 5:17am UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/please-review-my-screenplay-to-boost-my-competition-chances/563707/21 "2011-01-17T05:17:24Z")

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> [@GuanoLad](#):
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> Plus, I’m not sure if it’s my job to make dialogue sound distinctive to each character when it’s in a screenplay format. Isn’t that the actor’s and director’s job? I’ve never noticed other screenplays make distinctions like that. Nor novels. For me all characters use the same style of language, and it’s their behaviour and performance around that which distinguishes them.

Not all screenplays are good. I’ll grant you that having distinctive dialog is one of the hardest things to achieve in a screenplay, so don’t worry if you don’t have Joss Whedon caliber dialog just yet.

You can always rely on actors to make your script sound better, but that means that your script doesn’t sound good in the first place, and you’re relying on actors to make it sound better. Plus, have you ever worked with amateur actors? They can’t exactly read a line like Johnny Depp can, you know?

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> It’s funny that you didn’t pick up on the things that I think are its weaknesses. I won’t list them all here, but they’re things I have only recently recognised and plan to work in the solutions to them in the next draft, along with some of your suggestions..

Do you mind listing some of them? I won’t tell anyone.

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**Author:** ![GuanoLad](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/guanolad/32/42_2.png) [@GuanoLad](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/GuanoLad)\
**Post date:** [January 18, 2011, 12:27am UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/please-review-my-screenplay-to-boost-my-competition-chances/563707/22 "2011-01-18T00:27:09Z")

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Can I ask those of you who have read it, which doesn’t seem like too many from what I can tell, to go onto the site and [review it](http://studios.amazon.com/scripts/584)? I’m not asking for 4 or 5 stars, please just give it an honest review.

Thanks.

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