# The mordified poem **URL:** \ **Category:** Miscellaneous and Personal Stuff I Must Share\ **Created:** [April 21, 2015, 4:29pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201 "2015-04-21T16:29:43Z")\ **Posts on this page:** 20\ **Page:** 1
**Author:** ![Arkadeep\_Mitra\_2317](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/a/35a633/32.png) [@Arkadeep\_Mitra\_2317](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Arkadeep_Mitra_2317)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 4:29pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/1 "2015-04-21T16:29:43Z")
Guys thanks a lot for the immense feedback. Here’s my mordified poem.I will be glad to accept suggestions and critical appreciations. ``` Everest ``` I stood aghast in the faded light. Beauty with all its might, The blue sky blazing bright, Love at first sight. Little had I realized The way you could rein Every fibre of my being, Every impulse of my brain. Lingered by ur magnificance Lured by your Virginity, I climbed towards your pinnacle Jutting miles towards heaven. I died on the way With every forwarding step. Your toxicity never ceased, My cuts never healed. My body began to stoop, My arms paralysed,impaired My lashes conspired to droop, Seeking cheeks to sedate. And Oh! when you embraced me And welcomed me with joy As I fell headlong Into the soft and kind snow. In you I found life, In you I found ever rest. ---
**Author:** ![Southern\_Yankee](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/southern_yankee/32/2800_2.png) [@Southern\_Yankee](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Southern_Yankee)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 4:32pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/2 "2015-04-21T16:32:25Z")
Reported for forum change. ---
**Author:** ![Ed\_Zotti](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/e/fbc32d/32.png) [@Ed\_Zotti](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Ed_Zotti)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 4:41pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/3 "2015-04-21T16:41:23Z")
**Arkadeep** , please read the forum descriptions before posting. About This Message Board, where you initially posted this, is for concerns about board administration, not poetry. ---
**Author:** ![purplehorseshoe](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/purplehorseshoe/32/2996_2.png) [@purplehorseshoe](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/purplehorseshoe)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 4:47pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/4 "2015-04-21T16:47:50Z")
_squints quizzically_ MODIFIED poem? Is it a modified poem? ---
**Author:** ![Czarcasm](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/czarcasm/32/4050_2.png) [@Czarcasm](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Czarcasm)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 4:56pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/5 "2015-04-21T16:56:35Z")
What does “mordified” mean? ---
**Author:** ![Czarcasm](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/czarcasm/32/4050_2.png) [@Czarcasm](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Czarcasm)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 4:58pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/6 "2015-04-21T16:58:57Z")
“Lingered by ur magnificence” Really? ---
**Author:** ![OneCentStamp](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/o/13edae/32.png) [@OneCentStamp](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/OneCentStamp)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 5:01pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/7 "2015-04-21T17:01:41Z")
Well I, for one, am completely mordified. ---
**Author:** ![QuickSilver](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/quicksilver/32/7832_2.png) [@QuickSilver](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/QuickSilver)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 5:02pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/8 "2015-04-21T17:02:16Z")
Everest is hardly virginal. More peolple have been up that thing than a $20 hooker in Reno. ---
**Author:** ![OneCentStamp](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/o/13edae/32.png) [@OneCentStamp](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/OneCentStamp)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 5:03pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/9 "2015-04-21T17:03:53Z")
> [@Ed\_Zotti](#): > > **Arkadeep** , please read the forum descriptions before posting. About This Message Board, where you initially posted this, is for concerns about board administration, not poetry. If it were a better poem, would it have been moved to CS rather than here? ---
**Author:** ![Cabin\_Fever\_1](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/cabin_fever_1/32/2908_2.png) [@Cabin\_Fever\_1](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Cabin_Fever_1)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 5:20pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/10 "2015-04-21T17:20:11Z")
> [@Arkadeep\_Mitra\_2317](#): > > In you I found life, > In you I found ever rest. Not sure how to address this post as I am not poet and don’t know it, but these two lines kind of caused my eyes to leak tears. ---
**Author:** ![Cabin\_Fever\_1](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/cabin_fever_1/32/2908_2.png) [@Cabin\_Fever\_1](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Cabin_Fever_1)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 5:29pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/11 "2015-04-21T17:29:46Z")
Come on. Give a newbie a chance to explain. My take is Mt. Everest took a life of a loved one, but then poetry/prose has never been my strong point. ---
**Author:** ![QuickSilver](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/quicksilver/32/7832_2.png) [@QuickSilver](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/QuickSilver)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 5:35pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/12 "2015-04-21T17:35:56Z")
I’ve heard it said that every poet ought to be drowned at birth. I’m inclined to agree. ---
**Author:** ![Little\_Nemo](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/little_nemo/32/3120_2.png) [@Little\_Nemo](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Little_Nemo)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 5:40pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/13 "2015-04-21T17:40:46Z")
Okay, I can see the overall theme here: finding the thrill of life in its final moments. So the end of the poem works. But unfortunately a lot of the lines leading up to that end were awkward. ---
**Author:** ![Cabin\_Fever\_1](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/cabin_fever_1/32/2908_2.png) [@Cabin\_Fever\_1](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Cabin_Fever_1)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 5:44pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/14 "2015-04-21T17:44:25Z")
Just wondering…? [http://www.researchgate.net/profile/Arkadeep\_Mitra2](http://www.researchgate.net/profile/Arkadeep_Mitra2) > **[Dr. Arkadeep Mitra](https://scholar.google.com/citations?user=1xN2hh8AAAAJ&hl=en)** > > Assistant Professor, Department of Zoology, City College, Kolkata - Cited by 487 - Cell and Molecular Biology - Molecular Cardiology - Differential Proteomic Analysis - Cardiac Pathophysiology ---
**Author:** ![Cabin\_Fever\_1](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/cabin_fever_1/32/2908_2.png) [@Cabin\_Fever\_1](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Cabin_Fever_1)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 5:47pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/15 "2015-04-21T17:47:08Z")
> [@Little\_Nemo](#): > > Okay, I can see the overall theme here: finding the thrill of life in its final moments. So the end of the poem works. > > But unfortunately a lot of the lines leading up to that end were awkward. Waiting for the OP to respond, I would wonder if it would be less awkward if not being translated to English. ---
**Author:** ![Cabin\_Fever\_1](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/cabin_fever_1/32/2908_2.png) [@Cabin\_Fever\_1](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Cabin_Fever_1)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 5:51pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/16 "2015-04-21T17:51:38Z")
MODS…just researching the user-name. Please delete those links as it imposes a privacy issue. Sorry about that. My curiousness exceeded the boundaries. ---
**Author:** ![QuickSilver](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/quicksilver/32/7832_2.png) [@QuickSilver](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/QuickSilver)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 5:54pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/17 "2015-04-21T17:54:10Z")
> [@Cabin\_Fever](#): > > Just wondering…? > [http://www.researchgate.net/profile/Arkadeep\_Mitra2](http://www.researchgate.net/profile/Arkadeep_Mitra2) > [‪Dr. Arkadeep Mitra‬ - ‪Google Scholar‬](http://scholar.google.com/citations?user=1xN2hh8AAAAJ&hl=en) Yeah, if I were the OP, I wouldn’t quit my day job. ---
**Author:** ![Cabin\_Fever\_1](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/cabin_fever_1/32/2908_2.png) [@Cabin\_Fever\_1](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Cabin_Fever_1)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 6:12pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/18 "2015-04-21T18:12:06Z")
> [@QuickSilver](#): > > Yeah, if I were the OP, I wouldn’t quit my day job. You guys are so cruel lol. Not a poetry fan at all myself, but let us not chase him/her off. I will offer some chords and tempo rhythms. Maybe we can turn this into a Top10 hit! ---
**Author:** ![Maserschmidt](https://sea3.discourse-cdn.com/straightdope/user_avatar/boards.straightdope.com/maserschmidt/32/18829_2.png) [@Maserschmidt](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Maserschmidt)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 6:18pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/19 "2015-04-21T18:18:10Z")
> [@QuickSilver](#): > > Everest is hardly virginal. More peolple have been up that thing than a $20 hooker in Reno. But they’ve killed about the same number of people. ---
**Author:** ![Ludovic](https://avatars.discourse-cdn.com/v4/letter/l/7ab992/32.png) [@Ludovic](https://boards.straightdope.com/u/Ludovic)\ **Post date:** [April 21, 2015, 6:26pm UTC](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201/20 "2015-04-21T18:26:54Z")
> [@purplehorseshoe](#): > > _squints quizzically_ > > MODIFIED poem? Is it a modified poem? > [@Czarcasm](#): > > What does “mordified” mean? “mordified” may be the most poetic thing about the post. It’s appropriate. [Next page](https://boards.straightdope.com/t/the-mordified-poem/718201.md?page=2)