(note to the uninitiated: these are sentences found among tons of assessment essays written for college placement; I help score them.)
[mother to a kid picking the ash off a burnt tortilla]: “Just eat the ash, son. This way you’ll learn not to fear death.”
It has always been a wondering thought to wonder and to feel the emotions the people must have felt when JFK was shot by his wife and all the people that surrounded him.
A terrorist situation in a plane is a really bad experience for everybody.
Sorrow flooded my chest cavity and clogged my arteries. Guilt steamed behind my eyes.
I still remember the scent of dirt filled streets coursing through my nose–the way it smelled and tasted.
Japan is an island in the western Pacific ocean, and it is surrounded by water
jaw drops That’s going in my next novella. It’ll be set in the southwest, plenty of Latin, magical realism, Garcia Marquez type action going on. That will be the best line in the whole damn thing…
Well, aside from the fact that “dirt filled” could really benefit from the addition of a hyphen, the mental image of a scent “coursing” through a nose is just a little problematic.
The sentence extolling the corazon-enhancing effects of eating tortilla ashes IS excellent…
I do enjoy these. Even as I weep for the future of our utes.
So if a kid is not aiming to be an english major, is he/she better or worse off scoring low on these? I know that everyone should be able to express ideas and thoughts in writing better than is often the case. I wish they would. But how does scoring low affect the average (non english major) college student, academically?