56 cents for today's news AND the opinion of an idiot!

This is a letter to the editor that appeared in the Montreal Gazette, in reaction to the current trial concerning same-sex marriage before the Canadian Supreme Court.

Well. Here is our (mine and New & Improved Scott’s) response, and we would love any suggestions or editing.

Now, what we couldn’t say in the letter:

You are dumb. So so very dumb. “The pillars of viginity, purity…”? My goodness. What world are you living in?

Scott is shocked to find that Mr. Lombardi believes that the pillars of children are being thrown out. How’s that for a mental image? And we have decided that “pillars of viginity” would be a great name for a porn movie.

And while I would dearly have loved to add this, I figured I shouldn’t. This leter is a perfect example of why we need to put more money into education.

Ha! I know plenty of people who would like to lose their “pillars of virginity,” if you know what I mean. :smiley:

Anyway, my two cents on the letter are as follows:

I had to read this sentence twice for it to make sense. Maybe rephrase it to say, “there have been countless examples of societies who flourished while accepting homosexuality, such as the ancient Athenians.”

Otherwise, it looks good to me.

A couple of things you might want to change in your response:

  1. I don’t know that the term shotgun wedding explicitly refers to teenagers having to be married as a result of impregnation. You might want to do a bit of research on that.

  2. I think that, “the practice today of …” is much better then "the common habit". Indeed, the “common habit” doesn’t really fit at all.

Other then that, it looks fine.

Remember, write once, read aloud once, rewrite once, then send it off to the publishers.:stuck_out_tongue:

I’d remind him also to take a history course. People were not pure little virgins until marriage in the past. Homosexuality, premarital sex, “living in sin”-have ALWAYS been around.