Critique my resume

[Hampshire]

Still being employed currently I don’t know how long it will last. They want to lease out the spaces our sportshops are in and probably by year end.
I’ve been applying to jobs in my field (inventory control, inventory management, inventory analyst) I know I’m qualified for but I never get any calls for interviews.
I don’t feel my resume is that strong maybe because it’s hard to summarize everything on one page. Tell me where it’s hurting.

**** Hampshire Ave. NBrooklyn Park, MN 55445
Hm 763-315-****
Cell 763-229-****
John*****@yahoo.com
John ******

Experience March 2003-current Northwest Athletic Club
Minneapolis, MN
Regional Inventory Manager§
Worked as part of the regional team to ensure the success of the sport shop operations within the clubs enhancing the member experience in a profitable manner.§
Planned and executed periodic physical counts of inventory using the Inventory Management System along with an outside service. Reconciled these inventories and reported adjustments to be made to accounting. Followed up on significant variances, including strengthening of loss prevention procedures.§
Built, maintained, and managed an open to buy process, working with the merchandise department, club sport shop managers, and accounting management to balance customer demand with a reasonable amount of working capital dedicated to sport shop inventory.§
Built and maintained a process for identifying aged/obsolete inventory, and determined the most cost affective disposition of that inventory.
June 2002-Jan 2003 Musicland Co.
Minneapolis, MN
District Manager Trainee§
Retrained current staff to new SOP standards set by company.§
Hired and trained seasonal staff of 15 and met corporate sales goals.§
Trained and traveled with district manager for future company expansion.
Jun 2001-May 2002 Best Buy Co.
Ft. Myers, FL
Inventory Manager§
Maintained on hand accuracy through daily counts and research as well as prepared and reconciled physical inventories performed by outside firms.§
Hired and maintained delivery drivers and supervised DOT compliance.§
Developed and coached new warehouse supervisor to build team and attained performance goals.§
Developed and coached new loss prevention supervisor to build team and attained shrink and safety goals.
1997–2001 Best Buy Co.
Daytona Beach, FLInventory Manager§
Worked as integral part of management in achieving top scorecard results in region for FY2001.§
Consecutively lowered shrink results over 4 years staying under budget and under company set goal.§
Trained and coached supervisors over 4 years resulting in multiple promotions to management.§
Chosen to oversee initial inventories taken in New York market.
Education 1989-1992 University of Wisconsin-Milwaukee §
B.S. Architectural Studies§
Started with class of 300 and graduated with class of 30.
PC Skills Microsoft Office (Excel, Word, PowerPoint)TinyTermPeopleSoft10-key data entry

[Kythereia]

Looks fine to me–you’ve got a great set of credentials there

Add some stuff about your personal hobbies, spruce it up a bit on the page, and I think you’re all set.

[Quartz]

I think you need to be a lot less woolly and much more proactive and punchier.

@Hampshire

Planned and executed periodic physical counts of inventory using the Inventory Management System along with an outside service.

‘Supervised external stocktaking’.

Reconciled these inventories and reported adjustments to be made to accounting. Followed up on significant variances, including strengthening of loss prevention procedures.

‘Analysed discrepancies and designed and implemented loss prevention procedures resulting in X% decrease’.

Built, maintained, and managed an open to buy process, working with the merchandise department, club sport shop managers, and accounting management to balance customer demand with a reasonable amount of working capital dedicated to sport shop inventory.

Too woolly: ‘Improved capital / inventory balance Y% by co-ordinating multiple departments and front-line managers.’

Built and maintained a process for identifying aged/obsolete inventory, and determined the most cost affective disposition of that inventory.

‘Designed and managed improved surplus inventory disposal system yielding Z% savings.’

I could continue in the same vein.

[Hampshire]

QTS ,
Thanks, that’s what I was looking for. Some punchier words to spruce it up.

[GorillaMan]

My 2c…get the acievements to the beginning of the sentence:

@Hampshire

Worked as part of the regional team to ensure the success of the sport shop operations within the clubs enhancing the member experience in a profitable manner.

Change to: “Enhanced the profitability of the sport shop operations within the…”

Built, maintained, and managed an open to buy process, working with the merchandise department, club sport shop managers, and accounting management to balance customer demand with a reasonable amount of working capital dedicated to sport shop inventory.

WAY too long a sentence. You’re listing a whole load of things here which almost deserve to be seperate items. Which leads me on to…

Planned and executed periodic physical counts of inventory using the Inventory Management System along with an outside service. Reconciled these inventories and reported adjustments to be made to accounting. Followed up on significant variances, including strengthening of loss prevention procedures.

For this, I’d suggest a separate sub-heading, with the various elements listed as bullet point.