Ok, I’m going to enter an anti-tobacco poetry contest. Not because I particulary care, but because I like to win.
So, I want everybody’s opinion on the poem, and if they would vote for it if they were judging this contest. Any feedback is good, if it’s about the poem. I don’t want to here anything about the nature of smoking.
** Look At Me **
Look at me
Hanging out with my friends
WIth a cigarette coolly
Hanging out of my mouth
Lazy threads of smoke rising into the air
Stand close to me
Smell the aroma
Of tobacco that clings to my clothes
And wafts out of my mouth
In disgusting bursts.
Listen to me
Do you hear the rasp in my voice?
Do you hear how hard it is
To force enough air out of
My lungs to speak?
Help me
I can’t do anything but sit in bed
With tubes in my mouth and nose
I can’t go anywhere
My oxygen tank is too heavey for my
Weak and cancer-ridden body
Look at me
Look at my yellow fingers and teeth
Look at my stringy hair and wrinkled face
Look at the smokey death that hangs around my head
As the cigarette I no longer enjoy
But still need
Sends lazy threads of smoke rising into the air.
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