Boyo Jim and other prose Nazis: get the fuck over yourselves.

[Suil_Dubh]

@Boyo_Jim

The OP could pass a spelling and grammar test, but as a storyteller he sucks. He reads like a bright 12 year old rather than an adult. Perhaps I was overly critical given that it is considerably better than many first time posters. But I was really surprised to read that he is about to leave college rather than enter it.

Boyo Jim
Critiqued a post
With fervor and with unction
His main complaint
The OP’s screed
Showed narrative dysfunction
Alas for Jim
His own post has
Its own special malfunction
His last line starts
Incorrectly with
A coordinating conjunction