Euty, it made me think of Ruth. It is some of the most evocative metaphor that I’ve seen in a long time.
Let me worship at your shore
in coral and sea shell white
lying naked on your beach
enraptured in the musky wine dark
richness of your private coves.
Right away, you present the reader with an image, not of intrusion or encroachment, but of something that belongs where it is. You titillate our imagination from the opening line, and then immediately wrap it in innocence and purity with the second.
Let me plow your oceans
my sails unfurling inside you
billowing in your sea foam thighs
surrendering and surrounding me.
That verse is positively sumptuous. With the ethereal image of billowing sails, the words leap out and dangle around us like objects in a mobil handing over our heads.
Let me ride your currents
tack within your tides
and move with the rhythm
of your white waters rushing.
You’re almost Shelley-esque with your imagery and Poe-ish with your meter. “White waters rushing” causes an impedant break, followed by the breathless tappiness of words that have long since been left behind by thought that moved on.
Let me crest your waves.
This single-line verse captures the reader and pulls him into your fantasy, as he basks in the disequilibrium of being elevated suddenly. It is the heart — the essence — of what is hoped for when a surfer approaches a wave, and when a man approaches a woman.
Then capsize me and take me under
plunging me to your depths
and drowning me in you.
You capture the agony-ecstasy of total immersion. You evoke the feeling that preceeds a decision to commit, a decision to let go and trust. You capture the essence of faith and hope that resurrection will follow death.
Let your waters hold me there forever
A sacred treasure in your secret sea.
Euty, I just have to say that this is one of the most beautiful poems I’ve ever read. This final twist, abandoning us as you settle in to her secret sea, leaves us wishing you farewell as we contemplate our envy of your adventure.
Wonderful! Simply wonderful.