Thanks to everyone for their thoughts. I know I’m not a subtle poet; on the other hand too much subtlety can be miscontrued. And I do the the “ocean/sex” metaphor has been done before and is a little trite but still, it worked for me.
Thanks again!
Brave of you to post your poem here, Eutychus, and it made for an interesting discussion. I hope you (or others) do it again.