I wrote this paper, and I got a bad grade on it. I put a lot of time and effort into it, and the last critical review essay I did wasn’t critical enough, and this one was “too critical.” ARG!!!
Anyway, here’s the criteria, and my essay is below. It’s supposed to be around 750 words, and it a critical review on The Columbian Exchange. Just put a percent gade you think I should have gotten, and I’ll compare with what I actaully got. Grade on content, and not grammer, as this was for a social science class. I’d appreciate it.
MY PAPER:
Alfred Crosby. The Columbian Exchange: Biological and Cultural Consequences of 1492 Contributions in American Studies, Number 2
Westport, Connecticut: Greenwood Press, 1973
Pp. xv, 268; map, table, 4 Tables, 6 Maps, 14 illustrations
$68.00 hardcover; $16.50 paperback
The Columbian Exchange, written by Alfred Crosby, is an in depth look at the biological and cultural consequences of Columbus’s discovery of the New World. The Columbian Exchange focuses on the negative aspects of European exploration and exploitation of the Americas. Alfred Crosby focuses on the dependence on different foods, the changes in lifestyles, and the effects that the European flora and fauna had on the new world, and how it changed the Americas forever. His main point in this book was that the most important changes wrought by the European expansion into the new world were biological in nature, not social, political, or cultural.
To clearly understand Crosby’s point of view, we must understand him and his writing style. His background in history and health give some credence to his opinions and research. The book states that Crosby is a Research Associate at the University of California Medical Center, History of Health Sciences. He mostly uses empirical evidence and statistics to base his claims, but sometimes resorts to his own opinions and guesswork. He also uses tables and maps to help the reader picture history the way that he sees it. He relies heavily on other contemporary sources such as Del Castillo and Agiler to base many of his claims, but cites the exact references to these outside sources.
Though Crosby does a good job of making this book interesting and available to people who are not historians or biologists, he could have done some things differently to make the book more approachable to the average person. He has a tendency to deviate from the subject matter, and does not always provide enough evidence for his claims.
In some cases, these tangents allow us to better understand the point he is trying to make, but mostly it makes trudging through the endless examples and repetitiveness a chore. For instance, his many examples of how the European animals spread throughout the New World seemed very dry and repetitive. Crosby just kept expounding upon certain pieces of evidence, even after he had made his point. I think that in the hands of another author, this book could have been ninety pages with little loss of content.
He also seemed to be stretching for evidence and was using a lot of guesswork in chapter five when he was trying to relate the new food types with the sudden growth in population. Sure, it sounds good in theory, but he needs more clear-cut evidence to support his claims to convince the reader of the truth of his statements.
In chapter four, Crosby claims that syphilis in Europe came from the new world, without the proof to back up his claims. There are a few other theories as to where syphilis came from, but without evidence backing up his claim, how are we to know which one is correct, if any? He tries to support his theory with a table of the diseases present throughout time, but it is not enough to convince the reader that his is the correct theory, or that the other’s aren’t.
Another thing that got to me about the book is that he claims that The Columbian Exchange has had a worldwide effect. The book may present some of the changes that were wrought of the European expansion into the Americas, but it was far from worldwide in it effects. In fact, the “far reaching” biological consequences consisted of a small part of the New World, mainly Central America, the West Indies, Southern North America, and Northern South America.
To his credit, he stays focused on what the book was about: The biological aspects of the European expansion into the New World. He didn’t deviate much into the culture, social, or economic impact that the discovery of the New World had on both worlds. His focus on how the Spanish would not have had such success in the New World if it were not for the diseases that they brought with them, and the various elements of surprise that the Spaniards had over the natives.
To sum up, I would have to say that this book is good in getting its point across, but for all other purposes, it was mediocre. He did a good job of supporting the claims he made with evidence, though in some places this made it tough to read. Some of the aspects of the connection between the biology and history of the region were a little deep, and that would drive away the average reader. I would recommend it to those looking for an educational look at the causes of the changes in the New World, but for the average for-fun reader, I would say stay away from it.