My poem

In My Humble Opinion
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Pre-po-sitions

With shimmering sunlight,
Lighting my way,
I seek shady solitude,
With every word I push away,
The aspects I want to draw in closer.

The ignorant mind mocking,
Playing games of deadly stalking,
My own worst enemy and friend,
With shimmering sunlight,
Lighting my ways,
I seek to understand my mistakes,
Unsure if they can ever be forgiven or repaired,
Making them all the harder to eliminate from my life,

Struggling on this turmoil,
Breath and word mingle,
Smoldering the flames of my passions,
Choking all around me; in spasm,
The shimmering sunlight,
Intercepted rays,
Bounced back up to the sparkling sky,
I have found my shady solitude,
I have witnessed that ignorance first hand,

Moving on to find the next new revelation,
Basking in the shimmering sunlight,
I have found,
My feet are on the ground,
My eyes are wide,
My heart is still sore from the “battering pride”.
Standing proud,
With my courage pushing me along,
My ignorant mind; my drone.

Written by: Geo Kas (Karmic)

Well, anyone here understand this? Thoughts? Opinions?

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Your poem might be better placed in the “Cafe Society” forum now that the SDMB segregationists have moved our artistic betters to new digs with separate water fountains. The MPSIMS regulars are a friendly crew, however, and you’re welcome to pull up a lawn chair and crack open a brew out back of the trailer if you decide to stay.
“'Cos I’ve got a brand new combine harvester and I’ll give you the key,
Come on now, let’s get together in perfect harmony;
I’ve got twenty acres and you’ve got forty-three,
Now I’ve got a brand new combine harvester and I’ll give you the key”

It’s Wurzeltime!

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hhmm, I don’t know how to move this poem, and basically wanted YOUR Humble Opinions on it… hence why it is here… Oh well… one day I will post threads in the right section I suppose… sigh