ok, work in progress. tell me if i should continue it.

pristine muscles shake to gratify majestic passions
powerful strands of raw blossoms
nibbled at the edges of loosely tied ribbons
inside of which flutter bare silkiness
entreating you to confront its heartless longing
chiffon and torn silk rub against cherubim thighs

I started writing this, just pulling random stuff out of my head, and didn’t realize how “interesting” it was until I stopped to think of the next line should be. Give me your opinions, and if I should finish this thing [please].

I’m only speaking for myself here, but what is it supposed to be?
A list of possible sig lines?
I can’t seem to follow any of them.

Well, it’s the beginning of another poem. Sorry if that wasn’t clear when I wrote it. My style changes from time to time, the way it’s written in the style phase I’m in at the moment.

Keep going, keep going, consarnit…

And include a line about “Musky mung leftovers dripping from gritty lips” or something like that.

I agree, keep going! Great images there.

Thanks. I will continue on it tomorrow now that my mind has leapt out of the state it was in when I left off. I’d appreciate more thoughts on it though. A girl’s gotta have motivation, doesn’t she?

Finish it! There have been many times that I’ve started writing poems but never finished, and there are few things that I regret more than not finishing them.

And don’t listen to SPOOFE…that was just horrible.

Thanks guys. Eventually I’ll get back to that poem when I can get in the right frame of mind. Right now I’ve got too much school/vball stuff in my head to do that.

yeah yeah yeah! Keep going…a poem is never truly finished until it tells you that it’s finished (and then there’s the rewrite…)

I like the imagery you’ve used. When it’s done (or closer to done) promise you’ll post the rest of it, K?