[QUOTE=Queuing]
For those of you who may be creative writing teachers in university, if you could set aside what you know about this guy, what kind of mark would you have given this?
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A+!!! Um…yep, A+. Nice work, Mr. Cho. :eek: :eek:
Oh, you meant if they could set aside what they (now) know?
[QUOTE=OneCentStamp]
What’s disturbing about his writing isn’t what he writes, but what he doesn’t write; there’s so much obvious pent-up rage that he can’t fully articulate. Of course you and Stephen King have written better stuff – that may be why neither of you has gone postal.
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I dunno. I was pretty full of rage when I wrote said story. It was a revenge story, but it was my way of getting the anger out of my system. It seems to me that as an English major, even if he were full of rage he’d have written it properly. Most of the English majors I know (no cite, sorry…) are pretty anal about things making sense.
Then again, not all English majors are good writers. I ought to know better. 
I just don’t find his writing to be that disturbing. Stupid, yes. Disturbing, no.
~Tasha
[QUOTE=lissener]
And will again.
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As You Wish
The Dopeville Massacre - A play in one act by Scylla
Setting:
*It’s 10:00 on a Saturday night at a sleazy downtown bar. Deep in their cups are Scylla and Lissener. They don’t know each other but just happen to be the last tenants of this bar. Scylla is tall and athletic, a cross between Bruce Willis and Brad Pitt. His eyes burn with a fierce intelligence and a compelling charisma. He is confident yet modest, bold yet understated,.
Lissener is played by Horatio Sanz
Scylla: edscuse me, honorable sir. Kindly to pass me egg noodle?
Lissener: Nobody understands how hard it is to be gay.
Scylla: egg noodle?
Lissener: I am a rejected outcast of society. Isolated and alone. A pariah.
Scylla: It’s not exactly easy being a white heterosexual male, either, you know?
Lissener: Don’t give me that.
Scylla: No. It’s true.
Lissener: Why is that?
Scylla: We have no legitimate angst.
Lissener: Whiner. Your lack of angst is therefore it’s own angst, so stop complaining. It’s not like your gay.
Scylla: Bullshit if you’re gay you have no legitimate mysoginistic hatred of women founded on rejection.
Lissener: It’s not founded on rejection, it’s latent homosexuality. Your probably a homophobe too as an expression of your self-loathing. Are you a homophobe?
Scylla: Well, I don’t really like you.
Lissener: Homophobe.
Scylla: What’s your point. You still have no legitimate call to hate women.
Lissener: Sure I do. It’s scientifically proven that the gayness gene exists so I can be immune to women’s charms so that when the moment comes to kill all the women I won’t hesitate or feel regret.
Scylla: Really?
Lissener: Sure. All gay men are this way. We all loathe women, and can’t wait to torture and kill them as soon you straight gays get your mind off poontang and let us get with the program.
Scylla: I find this difficult to believe.
Lissener: Trust me. Once you’ve been corn-dogged it all comes clear.
Scylla: Why do you hate women, though?
Lissener: We all had Mom’s.
Scylla: I think you’re right. Let’s go pick up some girls and torture them
Lissener: I always knew you were gay.
Scylla: At least I never worked in a petshop.
(Insert scene here where they go and pick up a girl and humiliate and torture her, in a menage a trois torture/sex scene.)
Lissener: Cigarette?
Scylla: sure.
The end.
[QUOTE=CynicalGabe]
I’ve known a number of foreigners who have lived in the US for years, but are socially isolated enough (either loners, or sticking to their own little cliques) from English speakers that they never really learn English.
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You’re right. Just living in the U.S. does not make the person a better speaker or writer of English no matter how long the duration is. I read assessment tests as a side job, and sometimes I think the person is non-native, only to discover that they were born here or have lived here most of their lives and have developed what we call concretized errors. Or they just write things they way they hear them and don’t know it’s wrong because they don’t read enough.
“the” way , not “they” way.
[QUOTE=Scylla]
The Dopeville Massacre - A play in one act by Scylla
Setting:
*It’s 10:00 on a Saturday night at a sleazy downtown bar. Deep in their cups are Scylla and Lissener. They don’t know each other but just happen to be the last tenants of this bar. Scylla is tall and athletic, a cross between Bruce Willis and Brad Pitt. His eyes burn with a fierce intelligence and a compelling charisma. He is confident yet modest, bold yet understated,.
Lissener is played by Horatio Sanz (snip)
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w/a/d/r and all, is this the new ‘kinder gentler’ Scylla?
<showing my age>
By the way, am I the only one with that song stuck in his head now?
“I used to do a little then a little didn’t do it so a little got more and more…”
</showing my age>
[QUOTE=tashabot]
There’s a difference between being capable of conceptualizing violence, and being capable of actually carrying it out. A person’s fictional writing is no indication of their mental state; look at Stephen King. The man’s written some downright disgusting shit, and he hasn’t killed anyone yet (that we know of, anyway).
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Tell that to Bryan Smith. 
[QUOTE=tashabot]
There’s a difference between being capable of conceptualizing violence, and being capable of actually carrying it out. A person’s fictional writing is no indication of their mental state; look at Stephen King. The man’s written some downright disgusting shit, and he hasn’t killed anyone yet (that we know of, anyway).
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King just orders the killing – Richard Bachman and John Swithen do the dirty work.
Both of the plays are crap obviously.
I got the feeling that John, Jane and Joe in the Brownstone play are so similar that it’s like, in lieu of real voices to agree with him, he creates two offshoot yes-men to back him up in his frustrated hateful rubbish. Or maybe he just can’t write character.
[QUOTE=Tuckerfan]
Tell that to Bryan Smith.
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Or to John Lennon.
[QUOTE=wring]
w/a/d/r and all, is this the new ‘kinder gentler’ Scylla?
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Hmmm. In saying that I was “tall and athletic, a cross between Bruce Willis and Brad Pitt, with eyes that burn with a fierce intelligence and a compelling charisma, and am not both confident yet modest, bold yet understated” I did not add “kind yet gentle.”
This of course is because I was writing a work of fiction. If it were true then I would be all those things plus kind and gentle.
in case you don’t really get what I was saying - in a recent thread, you talked about making a concerted effort to not insult (or at least w/o provocation). in the post I quoted, you were insulting another poster, who, as far as I could tell, wasn’t even in this thread.
you’d waxed eloquent about how you aspired to be essentially (no quote, paraphrase) a kinder gentler version. and that seems at odds with the post quoted here.
I am interested in why he refers to himself as John, which I am assuming is him. He is either John or question mark. Why did he pick this name
[QUOTE=elelle]
Obviously, He was a very messed up person, and did a horrible act. .
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Maybe that one professor of his is right. She called his being disturbed “crap” and said he was just plain “mean.”
Well, depending on how bad one’s handwriting is, 조 very well could end up looking like ?.
[QUOTE=wring]
in case you don’t really get what I was saying - in a recent thread, you talked about making a concerted effort to not insult (or at least w/o provocation). in the post I quoted, you were insulting another poster, who, as far as I could tell, wasn’t even in this thread.
you’d waxed eloquent about how you aspired to be essentially (no quote, paraphrase) a kinder gentler version. and that seems at odds with the post quoted here.
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Scylla’s post was a reply to a post by lissener (quoted in Scylla’s post), which could easily be construed as an insult.
[QUOTE=Crotalus]
Scylla’s post was a reply to a post by lissener (quoted in Scylla’s post), which could easily be construed as an insult.
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I don’t believe either of them were offended, though.
Also, Scylla: you forgot modest.
BTW, I have heard that performances of the plays are up on youtube. I can’t get to youtube, so is this true?