Anyone willing to critique my (undergrad, Med Tech) personal statement?

In My Humble Opinion
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As some of you already know, I’m applying to universities in Washington and Oregon for a 2nd undergraduate degree (Medical Technology). I have to write a personal statement, and am feeling pretty optimistic about the near-final draft. But I’ve read and re-read it so many times that I’m afraid it’s all starting to run together. If any of you talented Dopers out there would be willing to critique it for me, I’d be very grateful. Let me know and I’ll PM it to ya.

Thanks!

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Any takers? Maybe I should’ve phrased the topic differently. I would post the whole thing up here, but I feel a little weird about that.

PLEASE someone proof my Personal Statement? :frowning:

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Okay! My email address I think is on my profile; or else you can PM it, if it’ll fit? I’ve never tested the boundaries of length-of-PM.