Allright, I’m baring my work to the world. In school, my english calss is having a poetry write off and I’m thinking about submitting this:
Tears falling from sleeping eyes
she woke
demonic dreams plaguing sleep
shr remembered.
Cuts made with sharpened words
she bled
Slowly and painfully,
she looked
ashamed by her own reflection
she fell
whipped by her own actions
she bled
fumbling
she searched
groping for pieces to fit
she tried
trying to grasp
she fell
holding her broken body
she cried
forcing back tears
she held on
killed by lack of trust
she crawled
letting go
she wished
holding on love
she waits
hoping for the kisses
of reassurance
But I’ve never had this read by anyone but myself and I’m wondering how to make this a winning piece… any advice??