I think your joke is different enough to stand on its own…and it’s funnier. I remember even as a kid and a connoisseur of gross jokes thinking the other was crude. And that’s saying a lot, lol.
I agree your punchline needs to be a bit snappier. But your original was still really good.
BTW, the other unusual thing…I was thinking this weekend of posting a survey about socks and masturbation. It’s a stock joke that boys and men jack off with socks and then wad them up after. This was a long joke on *Weeds *a few seasons ago.
What I never understood about it was what was done with the sock. Is it traditionally used over someone’s dink during masturbation, or just for cleanup? Socks never were part of my repertoire, although growing up I heard about the sock meme a lot.
Ah…gotta love the 'Dope as the forum where one can ask anything
Pretty sure socks have been referenced on Family Guy and Arrested Development. A Zebrahead song about Playboys arriving in the mail has the line “Let’s grab a sock, it’s time to rock.”
Talking about joke structure: Humor has a rule of three. The first instance sets the stage, the second establishes a pattern, and the third breaks the pattern for the punchline. Less than that doesn’t provide the same punch, more than that is boring.
Not so much a “joke” but I made up a cartoon a while ago.
It’s a picture of a guy sitting at a table in a restaurant and his waiter is serving him a whole roasted chicken. The chicken is wearing a little sailor suit with a pipe sticking out of his beak and one eye closed with the other eye wide open. The guy is looking horrified and screaming “Wait a minute!!! I ordered a chicken POT pie!!”
