Hey, I know I haven’t been on in a minute, but I have been trying to keep up with my school work. With this being my last year I am excited to graduate and head off to college. But before I can do that I am doing a poetry reading at a state level speech competition. Could I get some opinions on this poem I wrote, and help creating an intro to the poem. I need something that to explain the poem before reading, and some opinions on how the poem made you feel. If additional information is needed I will gladly reply to that.
Here’s the poem: Forever Lost, by: Lily Spencer
Smile
It’s a beautiful day
The birds are singing
Flowers blooming
sun is shining
Yet you can’t seem to make yourself do it
Make yourself smile
March 16, 2019
You just turned eleven
Just one week ago
Everyone’s acting fine
Like nothing happened last night
They don’t know what it’s like
To have something so precious forced away
Taken
Lost
Broken
Gone
Forever
They don’t understand what it’s like to be alone
What it’s like to be lost
In a world of regret
Where the monsters stand tall
Above everything and everyone
Untouchable
And out of reach
So powerful
Even when they meet defeat
Questions without answers
Why didn’t you fight harder
Scream louder
Try to do more
How were you supposed to understand
How were you supposed to know that this is what would change you completely
You’re reminded everyday
That normal is gone forever
You never laugh the same
Smile the same
Act the same
Why is it that even when you’re told you’re not alone
His memory somehow finds a way to remind you that you can no longer be yourself
That you will forever be lost
With no map to give you direction
No way to return to the place you felt so safe
Why you
Why now
You remember what it was like before
When the monster wasn’t so scary
You felt clean
Loved
Perfect
But now you’re damaged used
Lost
Gone
Forever
From who you were
From who you wish to become
Though this isn’t what hurts
What hurts is nobody understands how you can still feel his hands on your skin
And yet they say they can relate
But they don’t know the constant reminders
Or the way everyone looks at you with pity
The way they make it seem like you should feel bad for yourself
Still
The pain is unbearable
After all these years
You should just forget
It should be easy
You shouldn’t be so lost
You shouldn’t need to let yourself remember those scars
But you can’t forget
The permanent fixation of a physical memory
Something so ugly
So painful
Yet it gives you that comfort
That safety to be with something you know
Something that hurts
But lets you focus on it enough to forget
To forget the monster that made you be lost
You fight so hard to want
To need
Something so much more powerful than a broken memory
You want to go back
Need to go back
To fix what had happened
To get back what you lost
So much gone
They can see it in your eyes
You pity yourself for not being able to accept this new you
For not being able to accept that they may understand you
That they may be able to forgive you
To love you
All of you
Every broken
Lost
Unbearable
Part of you
That you can’t seem to forgive
Forgiveness comes in time
They say time will heal
Some scar are permanent
Some scars never go away
Created by a monster
Still showing through till this day
Only able to be accepted
To be lived with
Never allowing itself to be pushed away
Everyday is a battle
That you know far to well
With love
Loss
Forgive
And forget
The process to get to success
Something you long for
Something you want
That feeling of lost
Will soon be all but gone