Hi. I’m new to writing poetry and the following poem is one of the first I’ve written. Please take the time to read it and let me know what you think.
I walk around
Acknowledging the cloud of uneasiness lurking above me
Following my every move
I feel the inflicting rain drops
Descending upon me
And they stimulate insecurity
Like a brick wall enclosing me from reality
While acknowledging all this
I suppress it all
While I walk around
Please rate it on a scale from 1 to 10 (1 needing major work, 10 being the best). And I would love to hear your opinion. Thanks in advance.