I’m looking for sites that criticize writing of any sort, and give criticism in this format:
Words go here. (This is really plain and boring, it needs more action to it. Also, “words” is really cliche).
Like Fiction Bitch.
It’s specialized, but you can try the Critters[sup]TM[/sup] Workshop
Thank you. 
This thread is amusing in its directness, but you can’t dance to it.
Um, if we’re talking fairly short (which I somehow doubt) just post it here in CS and you should get a few decent comments.