"Peter Denies Jesus"-- A Stage Production written by me

I felt a little bit of divine inspiration during church service today, and came up with a list of Bible stories I could make into stage productions. (Incidentally, the first one I came up with was David, Bathsheba and Uriah, but that’s perhaps a little PG-13 for a first attempt).

The one I ultimately decided to write first was the story of Peter denying Jesus. After four hours, I’ve got a rough draft. I’d love to hear some constructive criticism.

(I apologize in advance for the weird spacing and indenting. It looks much better in the document, which I’ve got set up in “screenplay” format. On a message board post, it’s a little more difficult to pull that off.)

“Peter Denies Jesus”
A Stage Production

Written by
ekedolphin
for
[redacted]

Based on
Mark 14:66-72
With nods to
Matthew 10:32-33
(“He who denies me before men…”)
Matthew 16:16-23
(“You are the Christ… the rock on which I will build my church… I will be killed and rise on the third day… Get thee behind me, Satan!”)
Matthew 19:24
(“It’s easier for a camel to go through the eye of a needle…”)
Matthew 19:27-30
(“You shall sit upon twelve thrones, judging the twelve tribes of Israel…”)
Mark 5:21-43
(Jesus brings the priest’s daughter back to life)
Matthew 14
(Death of John the Baptist; Jesus feeds the five thousand)
John 2:1-11
(Jesus turns water into wine)
DRAMATIS PERSONAE

PETER (34 years old):  The first disciple called by Jesus, 	and "the rock upon which I will build my church".

PETER (60 years old):  Peter looking back at this time in
his life.  He will be the one directly speaking to the
audience, sharing what he was thinking and feeling,
through the hindsight of some 20-plus years.

ABBEY (older woman):  A maid of the High Priest.  She's
the first person to recognize Peter.

TALIA [TAL-yah] (younger woman, perhaps a teenager or 20-	something): A maid of the High Priest.  She's the second 	person to recognize Peter.

APPLE MERCHANT:  The third person to recognize Peter.
During the scene he's occasionally selling apples, both
by the bushel and individually.

VARIOUS SUPERNUMERARIES.
PRONUNCIATION GUIDE

Galilean: gal-uh-LEE-ann
Jairus:  JY-russ (first syllable rhymes with "guy")
Talia:  TAL-yah


EXT. PALACE, EARLY MORNING
GOOD FRIDAY

OLDER PETER is standing stage left, at a microphone.  He
will provide internal dialogue to the audience, describing
what he's thinking and feeling, and looking back on the
scene.  He's 20 years older than the PETER we will see
actually taking part in the scene, and he has the benefit
of hindsight.  This is one of the most pivotal moments of
his life, and he's had a lot of time to think about it.

VARIOUS SUPERNUMERARIES are already on stage, few in
number, as it's early in the morning.  Unlike Peter, whom
we'll see in a little while, they are properly dressed for
the chilly air.  Perhaps they're going about the business
of an early morning:  Chatting, gossipping, conducting
financial transactions.  Jesus may have been arrested last
night, but very few people are aware of it, as it was
done in secret.  And life goes on.

Among the supernumeraries are ABBEY, TALIA and
APPLE MERCHANT.  The maids are performing early-morning
tasks for the high priest.  Abbey is folding clothes,
and Talia is drawing water.  It's acceptable to do
these tasks with "invisible" props and let the audience's
imagination fill in the gaps.  

The apple merchant is among the supernumeraries at the 	moment, and in contrast to Peter, is quite jovial,
laughing and smiling.  He's clearly a well-liked member
of the community, and he takes pride in his work.

Right now, the Maids, Apple Merchant and Supernumeraries
have their lips moving, but nothing's coming out.  They're
part of the background.

ENTER PETER, stage right.  He is haggard, drawn, and
distraught.  The Last Supper was the previous night, and
it has been a very trying past few hours for Peter.  He
was present in Gethsemane when Jesus told him, James and
John to stand watch while he prayed.  Three times, he
failed to stay awake.  When Jesus was arrested, Peter
panicked and cut off the ear of one of the high priest's
servants.  He was rebuked by Jesus, who healed the man
and was led away.

Peter has not gotten any sleep, whatsoever, for about a
day.  He's running on fear and adrenaline, and is
borderline paranoid and delusional.

It is a cold morning, and the sun has not yet risen over
the horizon.  Peter sits down, rubbing his hands together
and blowing on them, huddling and shivering.
				OLDER PETER
		It wasn't supposed to be this way.  I was the 				first person to confess my belief that Jesus was 			the Messiah.  I thought the Lord and I were 				going to be together for many years to come.  				That He was going to bring forth the Kingdom of 			God on this Earth.  He even called me, Simon 				Peter, the rock on which He would build His 				church!

Onstage, Peter looks around, clearly nervous.  He's
uncomfortable being around such a large group of people so
soon after Jesus was arrested.  In his mind, everybody
knows about it, and soon they'll be coming after him.

				OLDER PETER
		Of course, only a moment later he predicted this
		would happen.  He told us that he would go to
		Jerusalem, and suffer the harrassment of the
		elder priests and scribes.  He said he'd be
		killed, and rise on the third day.

A beat.

				OLDER PETER
		It wasn't my place to rebuke him in public.  He
		was the Master, and I was His disciple.  So I
		took Him aside, and told Him he was being
		ridiculous.  "God forbid it!  That will *never*
		happen to you!"  And I was stunned by what He
		said next.  "Get thee behind me, Satan!"  How
		I went from being called, "the rock", to being
		compared to evil incarnate, I didn't know, but
		He wasn't done speaking.  "Don't put the
		interests of man before those of God."

Peter slowly rises to his feet, still shivering and trying
to stay warm.  He moves in the general direction of
everyone else, and is obviously trying, way too hard, to
act casual.

				OLDER PETER
		He predicted this would happen.  Many times.
		But I don't think I actually believed it.  How
		many times had he used metaphor in His stories?
		Surely not everything He said was intended to be
		taken literally.  "A camel going through the eye
		of a needle"?  Or the many times He told a story
		about fictional characters, and used them to
		illustrate a point.  The tale of the Good 					Samaritan.  Or the one about the Prodigal Son.
		Surely He was talking in parable when He said 				He'd be betrayed and murdered.

A beat.

				OLDER PETER
		Right?

Peter continues moving through the crowd, hyper-aware of
his surroundings, and very weary from the long night.
He looks ready to fight or flight at any moment.

Talia is drawing water from the well, while Abbey
folds clothes and supervises her younger charge.

				ABBEY
		Make sure you draw more water than usual, for
		the master's having company today.  And once
		you've done, check with Ruth in the kitchen,
		see if she needs help with the bread.

				TALIA
		Yes, ma'am.

Talia draws some water, struggles to lift the bucket
(it's heavy), and EXITS STAGE RIGHT.  Abbey sees Peter
for the first time, and greets him.

				ABBEY
			(casually)
		Good morning.

Peter practically jumps out of his skin, which in turn
startles Abbey.  Making a visible effort to calm
himself, he clears his throat and returns the greeting.

				PETER
		Good morning.

				ABBEY
		You're rather jumpy today, good sir.

Peter forces a smile.  It looks very fake.

				PETER
		Mmm?  No, I'm fine... thanks for asking.

				ABBEY
			(not convinced)
		As you wish.

Peter rubs his hands together and blows on them again.
With no cloak to put his hands into, or retain his body
heat, he's the only person in the scene who has to make
an effort to keep himself warm.

				ABBEY
			(as a mother speaking to an ignorant
			child)
		Do they not believe in cloaks where you come
		from?  If you'd brought yours, you'd not be
		cold.

				PETER
			(a beat)
		It's... been a long night.

Talia ENTERS STAGE RIGHT with an empty bucket, preparing 	to fill it again with water.  (Again, this can be an 	"invisible prop".)

				ABBEY
		Talia, bring a cloak for this gentleman.

Peter quickly raises a hand up in protest.

				PETER
		No!  No-- it's-- it's okay.

				ABBEY
			(matronly tone of voice)
		Come now, you'll catch your death of cold.
		If my master the high priest learned that I
		let someone freeze to death on our doorstep,
		he'd refuse to let me back into the house.

				PETER
			(more calmly now, put at ease)
		Thank you.

Talia EXITS STAGE RIGHT.

				ABBEY
			(conversationally)
		It's going to be a beautiful day.

				PETER
			(aside to the audience)
		I seriously doubt it.

				ABBEY
			(as she continues folding clothes)
		And how was your Passover meal?

Peter SITS DOWN again, holding his arms close to his
body.

				PETER
		It was... unusual.

Abbey pauses in her chores, moves a little closer to
Peter, and gets a better look at his face.  Peter, who's
facing forward, doesn't notice at first, but when he does,
he looks a little alarmed.

				ABBEY
		Say... don't I know you?

				PETER
			(feeling a little dismayed, but telling
			the truth-- technically)
		I'm certain we've never met before.

				ABBEY
		True, but... I'm sure I recognize you from
		somewhere.  Weren't you with that man, Jesus,
		who claimed to be the Son of God?

Without even thinking about it, Peter replies.  He
barely misses a beat.

				PETER
			(casually)
		I don't know *what* you're talking about.

				ABBEY
			(dismissively)
		Eh.

Chalking it up to perhaps her imagination, she goes
back to her task of folding towels.

At this time, a ROOSTER crows in the distance.  This
can be an offstage sound effect provided by someone's
voice, or a stock sound effect.

				OLDER PETER
		I know what you're thinking.  Because after
		this was all over, I was thinking the same
		thing.  "What a coward."  Right?  Well, you've
		got to look at it from my position.  Jesus had
		been arrested only a few hours ago.  I *knew*
		what was going to happen to Him.  He was going
		to be tortured and killed in the most brutal,
		sadistic fashion ever conceived by man, and
		there wasn't anything anybody could do about it.
		I was in the middle of a nightmare from which
		I would never, ever wake up.  It just seemed so
		easy to say, "No, I don't know Him," and try
		to get on with my life.  I wasn't even thinking,
		at the time, that He said it would happen.
			(A beat.)
		But my shame was only going to get worse.  Much,
		MUCH worse.

Talia ENTERS STAGE RIGHT, carrying a cloak for Peter.  She
moves over towards him.

				ABBEY
			(stopping her folding)
		Ah, good.  Thank you, Talia.  Place that cloak
		around the man's shoulders.  The cold's not
		going to let up for some time, still.

				TALIA
			(dutifully)
		Yes, Abbey.

Peter STANDS UP, and Talia moves around behind him,
draping the cloak around his shoulders.

				ABBEY
			(to Peter)
		You can return it after you've gone home and
		retrieved your own cloak.  If I'm not here,
		leave it with Talia.

				PETER
		Thank you, good lady.

Just then, Talia gets a good look at Peter.  A smile
starts to spread across her face.

				TALIA
		Hey... *I* know you.

				PETER
			(warily)
		*Do* you?

Unlike Abbey, Talia is far more certain that she's seen
Peter.  Her memory of him is quite vivid.

				TALIA
		Yes!
			(she turns to Abbey)
		You remember my friend Rachel, the daughter
		of Jairus, back in Capernaum?

				ABBEY
			(incredulous)
		The one who *died*?

				TALIA
		*Yes,* ma'am!  She was very sick, and I was at
		her bedside, giving her water, trying
		desperately to keep her alive for as long as I
		could.  I knew my efforts would be in vain, but
		I thought, "If I could just keep her alive
		*long* enough for Jesus to arrive, He could heal
		her."

Peter is starting to look distinctly uncomfortable.  He
remembers the occasion quite well.

				ABBEY
		But she died anyway, didn't she?

				TALIA
		Yes, ma'am.  I'll never forget it.  She didn't--
		she *couldn't*-- say a word to me.  She just
		smiled at me, as if... thanking me for giving
		my best effort... and she died, right there in
		front of me.

Talia begins pacing lightly.

				TALIA
		I started shaking her.  Pleading with her to
		wake up.  Pleading for her not to-- just give
		up, with Jesus on His way.  I barely remember
		what happened next, but I think-- I think I
		screamed for my mother to come in from the
		other room.  She saw Rachel, and started
		crying, too.  All of us, we were all crying,
		completely uncontrollably.  One of the men
		rushed out to tell Jairus what had happened.

Peter realizes he's about to be exposed, and starts trying
to make his way towards the Apple Merchant.

				PETER
		Excuse me, please.

				TALIA
		But-- Jesus came anyway.  He told us Rachel was
		only sleeping, and I...
			(looking ashamed)
		And I *glared* at Him.  I was *mad* at Him,
		thinking that if He'd only been there sooner,
		Rachel wouldn't have died!  And didn't He think
		I know a dead person when I see one?!  Where was
		He when I was sitting by her bedside all those
		hours-- I even fell asleep in the chair once
		or twice-- feeding her whatever she could
		swallow, and forcing water to her lips?  Who
		did He think He *was*, saying that?

	Abbey is enraptured by the story.  She'd never heard
	it told so dramatically before.

				ABBEY
		So what happened?

				TALIA
		He took her by the hand and said, in the voice
		of someone whose orders are *always* obeyed:
		"Little girl, I command you, get up!"  And...
		she opened her eyes, and rose up out of bed!
		She's still alive, to this day.
			(looking at Peter again, very closely)
		Yes... I *know* you were there with Him.  You
		were His right-hand man, weren't you?

				PETER
			(shaking his head vehemently)
		Young lady, I swear to you, I've never seen
		Him before in my life.  You've got me confused
		for someone else.
			(quickly, turning to Abbey)
		Thanks for letting me borrow the cloak.

				ABBEY
			(suspiciously)
		Don't mention it...

	Abbey and Talia continue their roles in the
	background, but again they talk without their lips
	moving.  Perhaps talking about the strange encounter
	they've just had.  But hey, who Peter associates with
	is his business, right?  They've got work to do.

				OLDER PETER
		She was right, of course.  How could anyone
		who'd witnessed that incredible, miraculous
		event ever forget it as long as they lived?
		It was then that I realized just how high-
		profile I really was.  I couldn't just slip
		into the background like my brother Andrew,
		or Bartholomew, or, say, Thomas.  Which is
		not to say that they're any less important
		than me.
			(a beat)
		But I had been with him through thick and thin;
		I'd been there during his most important
		teachings, and through many of the most
		fantastic, most public, miracles He'd performed.
		And I, myself, had cast out demons and preached
		in His name.  I was a minor celebrity.  And with
		Jesus under arrest and on the road to being
		crucified, I had a target on my back the size
		of the Dead Sea.

Peter finally reaches the Apple Merchant, and for the
first time we can make out what the Apple Merchant is
saying.  Abbey and Talia discreetly EXIT STAGE RIGHT
during this time.

				APPLE MERCHANT
		FRESH apples!  Come and get them before they're
		all gone!  Buy 'em one at a time or the bushel!
			(seeing Peter, a potential customer)
		Good day, sir!  You look like you've had a rough
		night of it.

				PETER
			(warily)
		You *could* say that.

				APPLE MERCHANT
		A little too much of the ol' Passover wine, eh?
		Ah, it happens to all of us.  You know, whenever
		*I* feel bad, an apple always perks me right up.

				PETER
			(chuckles softly)
		You're a good salesman, sir.  I'll have one.

Peter takes out a coin and hands it to the man.  It's a
bit more than the apple's worth.

				APPLE MERCHANT
			(with good cheer)
		You're very generous, sir; thank you.

Peter nods, and takes a large bite out of the apple.

				APPLE MERCHANT
		It's a dark day indeed, sir.  I hear that man,
		Jesus--

Peter jumps when Jesus' name is mentioned, but the Apple
Merchant, apparently not noticing, goes right on through
his sentence.

				APPLE MERCHANT
		--they arrested Him last night.  They've been
		trying to get Him for some *time* now, I reckon.

Peter opens his mouth to speak, closes it, and then opens
it again.

				PETER
		How-- how do *you* know Jesus?

				APPLE MERCHANT
		Why, I was there at one of His greatest 					miracles, sir.  We'd just gotten word that
		His cousin John-- you know, John the Baptist?--

Peter nods.

				APPLE MERCHANT
		--had been executed.  Well... murdered, really.
		Never heard such a despicable story in my life.

The Apple Merchant quickly looks around to make sure he's
not being overheard by the wrong people.  Satisfied for
now, he resumes his story.

				APPLE MERCHANT
		Herod had arrested him, see.  That...

The Apple Merchant considers using a vulgar word; thinks
better of it, says instead:

				APPLE MERCHANT
		...*woman*, Herodias... she was married to
		Herod's own brother, but Herod was sleeping with
		her.  Of all men around, only John had the guts
		to say to him, "This is wrong."  So Herod had
		him clapped in irons.  Anyway, awhile later,
		Herodias' daughter, I hear tell, danced for
		Herod's court, and she was magnificent.  Herod
		was so impressed that he promised her anything
		she wanted.  Without hesitation, she asked for
		John's head!  On a platter, no less!  This
		sweet, innocent little girl, or so everyone
		thought.  You ask me, Herodias put her up to it.

				PETER
		Perhaps.

				APPLE MERCHANT
		So anyway, the news gets back to us, and I was
		as startled as anyone.  And I knew Jesus would
		be upset.  I hadn't met Him before, but I'd
		heard the stories, of course.  Teacher, miracle-
		worker.  I'd had a friend who told me about that
		water-into-wine thing at Cana, so I also knew
		he was the life of the party.

Peter glares at the Merchant mildly.  He doesn't find that
particularly funny.

				APPLE MERCHANT
			(clearing his throat to recover)
		Anyway, I just... thought I'd offer my
		condolences, you know?  Let Him know He wasn't
		alone.  Of course, five thousand *other* people
		had the same idea, and I didn't get anywhere
		*near* him.  By that time it was late, and I
		hadn't brought any food with me, and practically			nobody else had, either.  It was looking like
		a long, hungry walk home was ahead of me.
			(chuckles)
		Next thing I knew, I was being handed a large
		basket of fish and bread, and being told to
		take as much as I needed and pass it around.
		I did as instructed, but I asked the person
		next to me:  "Where did this generous bounty
		come from?"  The man answered, with a laugh,
		"You won't believe this.  This is what's left
		over from five loaves and two fish."

Peter has long since gotten the gist of what story the
Apple Merchant's going to tell, so he doesn't look
surprised in the least bit.

				PETER
			(dryly)
		You don't say.

				APPLE MERCHANT
		Craziest thing I ever saw.  There was enough
		for me to have seconds, later, and from what
		I hear, there were a dozen basketfuls of food
		left over at the end of the day.  Guess
		someone's family ate quite well for awhile.

Peter takes another bite of the apple while the Merchant
speaks, and starts moving away from him as he finishes
the last line.

				PETER
		Yes, well... that must have been an interesting
		day.  Sorry I missed it.

				APPLE MERCHANT
		Wait, you're saying you weren't there?

				PETER
			(without missing a beat)
		No.

Older Peter sighs softly, raising his palm to his hand.

				OLDER PETER
			(gently, as if saying this now will change
			history)
		Don't do it, Peter, you poor fool.

				APPLE MERCHANT
		Oh, c'mon now.  My eyesight isn't as great as
		it used to be, but you were standing right at
		Jesus's right side the entire time, weren't you?

				PETER
			(angrily)
		What's *with* everyone today?!

				APPLE MERCHANT
			(conciliatory)
		Say, friend, I don't mean to upset you.  But
		you're telling me you weren't there?  You're
		not from around here, though, are you?  You've
		got a very Galilean accent.

				PETER
			(adamantly)
		Look, friend.  I'm telling you-- I *swear* to
		you-- I don't know the man; I don't know what
		you're TALKING about!

At that very moment THE ROOSTER CROWS AGAIN.  Peter
immediately claps his hand over his mouth, a look of
stunned realization on his face.  Without saying another
word, he dejectedly moves towards STAGE CENTER, and sits
down again.

				OLDER PETER
		He predicted this too, of course.  "Before the
		cock crows twice, you will deny Me three times."
		Like before, I thought He was crazy.  There was
		no way in a million years I would ever, EVER
		do that.  Yet as soon as I heard that rooster
		the second time, I knew what I'd done, and
		I realized I couldn't take it back.
			(a beat)
		I'd *denounced* him.  I'd been the first person
		*ever* to call him the Christ, the Son of the
		Living God... and here I was, a man fearing for
		his life, saying I'd never met Him.  Hadn't He
		already promised me my reward in heaven?  Should
		I have *truly* been concerned what other men
		might do to me?  No.  But I was concerned with
		the here and now, and the certainty of being
		subjected to the same agonizing death that He
		was about to face.  I would have done anything,
		*said* anything, not to have to face that.
			(a beat)
		I failed, all right?  For the third time that
		night, I tried to do what was right, and I
		failed miserably.  And as I sat there, on the
		stairs of that temple, all I could think about
		was what He once said:  "Anyone who denies me
		before men, I'll deny *him* before my Father in
		heaven."

				PETER
			(crying)
		My God... *what* have I *done?*

				OLDER PETER
		All I could do was contemplate my fate... His
		fate... and pray that God would be forgiving.

PETER EXITS STAGE RIGHT.

END OF SCENE

I don’t have any detailed critique- but very well done. I liked the dialogue & actual fleshing out of the characters. For your next project, as a companion to this, you might consider Peter’s restoration at the end of John’s Gospel.

Just a point you might want to consider. Posting something on this message board gives the Chicago Reader the right to use your material in pretty much any manner it wishes. That means that you’ve just given them the right to sell your play to a producer.

:smack: Thanks. Next time I’ll post it somewhere else and put a link on it.

In the meantime, I’ll trust that they don’t do that, and haggle over copyright if they do.

Good idea. The thought had occurred to me. Especially since the two events mirror each other so well. I imagine it made Peter just a little more crazy when he realizes Jesus asked him three times if he loves him. Just as Peter thrice denied him.

The last thing I want to do in this play is to disrespect Jewish people in any way, shape or form (even though, obviously, I disagree with them about Jesus’ divinity).

So I have a question. When the apple merchant makes his references to alcohol-- “Hitting the Passover wine a little too much”, and “water-into-wine; life of the party”-- could either of those things be taken the wrong way? My intent is to show the Apple Merchant as the friendly, jovial type, but I certainly don’t want to portray Jewish people as being hedonistic alcoholics.

Yeah, I’d say it would definitely work better if you show rather than tell Jesus forgiving him. My experience is that Christian play audiences like their happy endings, especially ones that have to do with forgiveness.

Not that I think it’s bad as is.

Thanks. Yes, I think I’ll definitely do a sequel centered around Peter’s Restoration, if this play is well-received and ultimately performed.

In this particular case, if the play is performed during a Maundy Thursday service, it’s one of the only times I can think of where the audience will expect and possibly even demand a downer ending. The overall mood of the Maundy Thursday service, at least at our church, is quite somber.