Please read my short script (need feed-back)

OK!! this is a script for a “realism” unit (yeh its meant to be realistic but it sounds more like a comedy…)
Stan is just about to walk out the front door until he is stopped by his mother

Saffron- Sttttaaaaaan… Where are you going now sweetie?

Stan- To hell hopefully… rolls eyes

Saffron- Don’t be silly! I’m your mother! I deserve to know.

Stan- K… Fine I’m going to the movies…

Saffron- I think somebody’s lying!

Stan- You’re 39 and act like a damn 12 year old…

Saffron- Stan don’t swear in this house, god is watching.

Stan- I didn’t swear ya moron

Saffron- I ought to get Rod to come in here and discipline you

Stan- I"M 16! maybe he should discipline you! you’re the one having a god damn affair with him…

Saffron- How dare you say that!! It’s not true, I love him very much and you know your father abandoned me…

Stan- Yes… Of course he abondoned you… He just gave up everything he had to go to America to get that job at the oil company! He even sends you money!!

Saffron- I’m not going to listen to this, I’m your mother and have control! go to your room.

Stan- having troubles trying to take her seriously My… Ah… room ? Well… anyway im going to be late, so GOOD BYE.

Saffron- No… just sit down, I want to talk! Don’t go to those… evil concerts sits down

Stan- That’s good coming from you… sits down

Saffron- WHAT ? stop back chatting your mother, it’s disrespectful.

Stan- So what should we talk about ? The beatles… Titanic ? Jerry springer ?

Saffron- Do you think Jerry is cool ? I do think he is pretty hip… I really loved one episode…

Stan- I remember a good episode, the one about mother’s trying to act younger than they are…

Saffron- Don’t get smart with me… stands up

Stan- Wouldn’t be somthing you’re used to…

Saffron- STAN… What happened to you… picks up an old photograph what ever happened to you…

Stan- Reminiscing about our trip to Disney Land 9 YEARS ago ?

Saffron- Maybe you need councelling ?

Stan- Maybe some group therapy ? Me… you ? Rod and DAD ?

Saffron- Look…I told you not to mention this, its mother’s privacy you’re invading by saying that…

Stan- Can’t handle the truth huh ? stands up

Saffron- You’re really stepping on thin ice here Stan…

Stan- That is my cue to leave ?

Saffron- No! How dare you continue to treat me this way!! I gave you food and shelter your whole life…

Stan- So that makes you a good parent ? cut the bull…

Saffron- I buy you clothes!

Stan- Your talent just never ends… starts walking towards the door

Saffron- I HOPE you are going to work…

Stan- I quit

Saffron- Another opportunity lost…

Stan- It was Macca’s…

Saffron- That could of paved your way for the future

Stan- Paved my arse to slave labour

Saffron- Well you better start studying more… I want to see all A’s…

Stan- How about Dux too ? School captain even ? sits down

Saffron- shakes head a Tutor could help you

Stan- Things have changed a lot since you went to school… You probably dont realise that

Saffron- I’m sick of hearing excuses

Stan- You can be so ignorant, just shut up

Saffron- I’m going to warn you one more time…

Stan- Yadda yadda YADDA! stands up and nearly exits door

Saffron- You know… I am capable of having you evicted from this house ?

Stan- Oh yeh… about that… dont bother cooking dinner for me, I’m not coming back

Saffron- It was a mistake for me to ever of had you…

Stan- Bitch!

Saffron- That’s IT!! I’m going to ring the police!!

Stan- HAHA! Ring a tutor you stupid whore! slams the door and exits