Criticisms on a short story (<4K words)

I can email it as an attachment to anyone willing to brutally criticise it. I have had some reviews and they all sound a tad sycophantic. I want people who have no vested interest in not pissing me off to tell me the truth. Anyone interested – first 5 responses – inbox me your email address.

If it helps, it is a crime drama. Not very long, just looking for honest feedback, no sycophantic dribble.