Student walks along.
Stops, pondering thoughtfully.
Look out for that truck!
This really happened to me. I had stopped on a sidewalk corner to think about something, and a rental truck slipped its brake about half a block uphill behind me. The first I knew of it was when it hit the brick wall about ten feet away.
grr. bad Haiku makes me angry. don’t any of you know the full rules behind Haiku?
beyond simple 5-7-5 you must do four things;
1.) each line must be a full sentence or phrase; they cannot carry over from line to line.
2.) the first line must be an abstract metaphor relating to the subject.
4.) the whole thing must be related to your meditative learnings if you are buddhist. otherwise, it must have at least a sense of higher focus, or an aim at the nature of a subject rather than the subject.
a good example;
so fire dances
mine thoughts are ephemeral
true Haiku eludes
a faulty example;
*damn it i can not
think of a single Haiku
to share as right now *
see the differences, even though both cover the same thing? hopefully you can see how you might do true Haikus, or at least better ones.
you know, i taught this lesson in the pit too… pick up on it! i don’t want to explain it in all the boards as this Haiku-mania spreads.
So let me get this straight…
‘Americanized’ haiku, which is not really proper to begin with, must follow 4 strict rules even in a light-hearted vein or be “bad”, yet common English rules like, say, capitalization doesn’t count?