i like the direction that storyline takes, but there really is no strong evidence of time passing (is that on the writing or the directing?)
spur of the moment rewrite but… what if instead of jim standing at the door, it showed jim sitting down in the audience, and then eventually everyone outside (jim included) playing flashlight tag in the parking lot? mose is playing with a shuttered lantern. THEN you introduce the “pam is calling, wondering what the hell is taking so long” call.
of course, going in retrospect and punching up a script is easy. coming up with the idea is the hard part.