Anyone want to read my first short sci fi story?

May I read it, too, please? My email is thi6@yahoo.com

It has been sent, thi6. I am undergoing some changes now thanks to the only set of feedback I have received so far. Please provide me feedback you guys, it isn’t that long. I am interested in unanswered questions, grammar, and plot holes. If some of my pseudo-science doesn’t make a lick of sense, I want to hear about that too.

Count me in, I think my e-mail is in my profile. It’s frdezavalia@hotmail.com

sturmhauke@attbi.com

Fire all mail torpedoes! On second thought, just send a subspace message.

Sent to Estilicon and sturmhauke. Please provide constructive criticism that maintains in the scope of short fiction. I a question arises that seems integral to the story, please point it out.

Sorry to bump this, but I haven’t seen it. Did you send it to pls@claymore.nu?

Priceguy, I thought I sent it there. It didn’t bounce back. I am sending it there again.

IIRC Hans Morovec and Fred Pohl once collaborated on a story based on a similar concept.